WHAT's LOVE?

A heart-felt poem.

WHAT'S LOVE? [PART1]

Among the noises of the world
There travels a voice deep and dull;
Oh! the beauty spreads its wings
And bright colours stain all things;
Love is what?
A sin or a lusty thought
Or is it a mortal fire,
a desire of the heart?
I know not, I know not.

Eyes speak and eyes listen
Words only they understand;
They cast a spell on senses
Dissolving the limits of that sky
and this land.
Eyes are cruel, they wander,
they lie;
Repeat the same words to every other eye.
Love is what?
A limitless space, or a dot?
Or is it a mirage,
a foul game of the heart?
I know not, I know not.
 

-Padma.

Author's Note

Please review my poem very honestly.

Reviews

[nora]

oh my GOD! this is really really great! i love the concept of being to tortured by not knowing what love is, not even having an idea. and i love this description of eyes:

"Eyes are cruel, they wander,
they lie;
Repeat the same words to every other eye."

that part hit me hard, because it sort of made me think of people in general. you know? people wander and lie and tell you things that they've told so many other people. and to relate that to love, they might tell you they love you and have said it to too many other people. you know?
this is a really remarkable poem. i do have some advice though: maybe you should make it rhyme all the time or not at all, because its sort of distracting for the reader. just a pointerr :)
keep it up!

[Antonio Valentino]

If you're a simple person with simple thoughts, then I am illiterate (did I spell that right? lol).

Padma, this was amazing!
And yes, I no not either.

As it should be.
Antonio

[Gandré]

this is sweet, I loved it. thank you also for your submission to my contest. your words come across honestly and innocent. There is nothing pretentious about it. I loved this.

[Lydia]

This is good. I liked it a lot better than the last one, it just seems to flow more smoothly. Great job!

[Paladin4life]

Than you my friend for entering my contest. I appreciate your poetry and your willingness to be in the contest. As I said earlier I love this poem and the thought behind it. It makes you think. You really captured the human condition! Good work!

[Kayla]

This very good poem!! It makes me wonder if love is just one big lie or is it something very passionate. I think you put those thoughts into a wonderful piece of writing!! Great job!!

[Paladin4life]

Lets see, I love the thought behind the poem and feel that it is well done. You capture the human struggle to understand something that goes beyond understanding. Love is certainly one of those things. I offer one piece of advise. If you want to rhyme follow the same pattern from start to finish, instead of occassionally doing it. I love the poem and is fabulous as is.

[bluessadmood]

Oh God ,that was great ,but surely love is a mystery ,who can solve..
Among the noises I hear all..A voice sounds deep and dull
beauty spreads everywhere,Bright colors stain all things
What love is , sin or lust,fire or heart desire..I know not,I know not
Eyes speak ,Eyes listen,words understood,they cast a spell
then no limits to sky or land..so what love is..a game of heart?
I know not..I know not
That was so nice so lovely ,how I enjoyed this..
lovely write..