My... secret world, I guess. A fantasy universe of my own invention.
Welcome to my Garden, my World, my private Wonderland. But be careful. For if you come, you may never want to go -back- again.
Beware the house of mirrors, an eternal repetition. You could run through forever, and
never
find
your way...
...out.
Then do continue on. There's so much more to see, to hear, to taste, to touch, to smell.... fill up your senses in the Garden of Taol, let the sweet nectar of the RainaGruen flower drip slowly onto your tongue, hear the faraway roar of the Cikeri Beast, that low, deep rumble that sends chills down your spine... open your eyes to the wonders around you, let my nature fill your sight. Marvel at the painted sky above you, deep crimson splattered with a harsh violet, subtle blue. Feel the brush of the Pattermonkey's tail as he swishes by you, the small frail body chattering away at the trees. Let the Wind speak to you, she has much to say, as you have much to hear.
Welcome to my Garden, my World, my private Wonderland. But be careful. For if you come, you may never want to go -back- again.
...you know...this may sound odd, but this literally brought me to tears... Seriously... Maybe the devil can cry...? Crud...
I have dreams of this perfect garden... You just made it even more vivid... Listen, this is going to be a really horrible review, because I find that I am at a loss for words. I don't know what others would think of this, nor should I even care; this is one of the most beautiful things I've ever had the pleasure of reading... It is as if the heavens opened themselves to reveal a Paradise not of this earth, something of emerald and azure...something... I'm going to stop... This is very intense, and special.... I wonder, if people would read something like this, even as it may be an experiment, should they be motivated to seek heaven instead of hell? Perhaps you have shown me the way...
Great imagery! I felt like I was in your garden. I loved it. It was very strong and soooo detailed. I really think the repeat at the end really took it home. I enjoyed reading this a lot. Thanks :D
Hmmm....
I always like to offer constructive criticism cause that is what I live for in return.
However, there isn't much wrong with this...or much to be wrong about I guess. Your descriptions are amazing, I feel like I can imagine myself in this place just by reading your words, no extra effort. Thanks for the update, Pet. Brilliant work.
I'd like to visit your garden...I have a similar place I see inside my mind...and also real places I visit in nature that I always have a hard time leaving. Your use of language here is wonderful with beautiful visions and specific animals and names. I'd like to hear more about your garden.
A world inside the mind, what a vivid picture you create with so many senses used.........step in and never wish to leave. I know alot of creative people have gardens in their minds, sometimes somewhere to sit and be alone, or visit gone loved ones, and this piece reminds me of that. Beautiful.
The poem is very interesting. Your world sound like a good place. So many things and places to go. I like the description and detail. A outstanding poem.
Coyote