My Wish

A just-for-fun poem. About a month ago, I went on a zero sugar diet just for the heck of it. Like- NO sugar, fruit being the only exception. So I wrote this little thing in dedication.

My Wish

 

I wish I had a gumdrop,

as blue as blue can be

I wish I had a chocolate bar,

preferably Hershey's

I wish I had some Smarties,

or perhaps a Milky Way

This diet's gonna kill me

and it's only the

first day.

Author's Note

I suck at grammer-spelling, so can anyone tell me if Hershey's, Milky Way, and Smarties should be underlined or italicized because they're brand names?

Reviews

[Sasha]

Sooooo you're not surprised, but I love this. And anyone on top of anyone that makes a big deal about the names of candy being italicized.. If you want to know for the sake of being a better writer, fine, but I will attack them. This is really cute with a bouncy little rhythm to it. And your taste in candy is impeccable. lol

[_thesovo]

Y'know Boss...

This poem smells nice to the brain. ^_^

[Robyn]

this makes me laugh! love this!
eating is one of my main hobbies so I understand hahaha
check out my poem "fat"
you will appreciate it for sure!

[Ed Hart]

wonderful...i immediately shared it with my wife...double praise from both of us

[.]

LOL brilliant! Why do we do it to ourselves! Lighthearted but a reality in todays 'ultra thin' society..really enjoyed this

[Samuel Dickens]

Excellent, entertaining little poem on a very serious subject. The only time I ever lose weight is when I'm in the hospital and they control everything I eat.

[Rose Tyler]

Your taste in candy is magnifique! This is a cute little poem and I'm sure people who have been on a diet can relate to this!

[Kitten]

Screw the diet, I love chocolate.

[Lydia Blackwell]

this one is cute- I think you executed the grammar correctly. I didn't get the usual distortion of the facial features that my body subconsciously gets when I see bad grammar... I'm a freakin' OCD case.... not that mine is perfect- far from it-

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This is really good. I liked it. I want a Hershey's now. I want to actually be a rain drop that fell from the sky. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Miss Coral]

Ahh, I love this!! Adorable!
No, the brand names do not need to have anything else grammatically- capitalization is all they get.
Flawless rhythm, fun topic, and perfectly spoken.
Great job!