Alone He Walks

Inspired by this picture, it talks about how when we go through life, we sometimes feel alone, and may even convince ourselves that we are alone, even though we -always- do have Someone beside us.

The guns go off

The bullets fly.

Alone He Walks

 

Death and sadness

come his way.

Alone He Walks

 

Trembling and scared

They strike his face.

Alone He Walks.

 

When Life has torn

His hope to shreds

He thinks...

Alone He walks.

 

But when a Hand

takes his own gently

No longer

Alone... He Walks.

 

 

Reviews

[Mai Aliza]

I love the repetition and the narration. I see the story, and the simplicity makes it all the better. Great write.

[Natalie]

Gosh I love your work. Your a very powerful writer

[Kitten]

Perhaps a little more would have gone farther. Is being alone always a bad thing?

[Miss Coral]

Wonderful piece- I have to disagree with Arasinya, though. For me, the short lengths of the stanzas rendered the repetition ineffective, too distracting to be as powerful as it would have been otherwise. However, I thought this was great despite that. Great job. :)

Coral

[Adora.xo]

Wonderful wonderful piece dear! The short length of the poem compliments the repetition, not making it seem annoying. This was a simple yet very very meaningful poem, and a beautiful story! Great job love!

~Adora

[MiidniightSoul]

This is amazing. I love it, the end is very powerful. Stunning. Such a great piece of poetry. ^__^

[Sasha]

I don't know how I missed reviewing this one, but I'm glad I caught it now. :) It's short and straight-forward, but tells a really touching story. I loved the repitition and how you switched in the last two lines - saying the exact same words but with a completely different meaning. It's clever and beautiful.

[_thesovo]

:) Padfoot.

[Tea And A Cheshire Smil..]

I like this :) It's pretty short, but it's still really effective.