Musings on a Sunday Afternoon

The crunch of tortilla chips

and sharp snap of a beer can being opened

on Football Sunday

sometimes do a better job of reminding me that

life is beautiful

than birds or flowers.

Author's Note

I feel like the wording is a bit awkward... any advice?

Reviews

[Kaylor Mason]

The words themselves are fine . . . if you want to improve the wording, all you have to do is move them around and reorganize the stanzas

[PadfootBlack]

Right, that's the part I'd like help with. :)

[Kaylor Mason]

ok--go by syllables

[Kaylor Mason]

make "sometimes do a better job" one solid line