The Ocean Moves

Up ahead, a log bobbles,

dancing with the waves

The calm grovels,

anxious to be saved

Bears walk on paws,

step by step, through and through

The master is told to move the ocean, 

As the alternative is for it to move you.

Reviews

[Urja Gokani]

Very interesting. I really like the first stanza; the way in which the speaker notices every detail of the mundane act of painting nails reveals his deep affection for the subject of the poem. The symbolism of painting the ring finger first is very telling. I have to admit, you lost me for a second on the part with the ocean - it just seems to escalate so quickly. But I suppose that's the point; it demonstrates the feeling of being overwhelmed by the possibilities and implications of this relationship. (At least, that's how I interpreted it - forgive me if I'm wrong!) And I do like the way you transitioned from the nail-painting to the "ocean" through the subject crying over a "ripple" in her nail. Although it's quite abrupt, that makes sense, and it's a cool idea. Finally, the last two lines are interesting. The "beach" seems to be a metaphor for this intensely emotional (and potentially semi-hysterical) side of the subject that the speaker has never witnessed before. It's a great way to wrap up the poem. Overall, very nicely done!

[Paul Bell]

Like this, you can picture it.

[Pablo & Rookie]

Thank you Paul I sincerely appreciate the review and feedback; I hope you have a wonderful day!