Exposed

Like flickering candle light
Glimmer of flames blending
Fumes of different colours
Dance as they burn
Like the fragrance of incense
Angles disperse in the air
As they float and fill up spaces
Sunshine splatters a scenery
To the music
Coming from swaying branches
Of many leafy tress
Mingles with the vibes of the restless waves
To create melody of voices unheard
To human ears in peace
The melting away of the symphony
Takes over melancholy
Silent are the words
Spoken to someone unknown
Feelings bulge, ooze and erupt
Like gravity pulling and extracting
Emotions from the chambers of the heart
So tightly locked away in caution
Love rips it right open
Leaving the vital organs exposed
To who knows what?

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

Amazing metaphor and multi-sensory imagery here. Great piece, Prathama!

[PP]

Thank you ever so much Rita, glad you liked it :)

[quinfinn]

this is truly gorgeous and the metaphorical imagery speaks in volumes to the soul and heart. well penned!

[PP]

Thank you Quinn, this is a very quick write uploaded from my phone glad you enjoyed it :)

[quinfinn]

always a pleasure, Prathama

[PP]

..........:)

[Sami Khalil]

"Like the fragrance of incense
Angles disperse in the air
As they float and fill up spaces
Sunshine splatters a scenery
To the music
Coming from swaying branches
Of many leafy tress
Mingles with the vibes of the restless waves
To create melody of voices unheard
To human ears in peace "
A very descriptive poem full of great imagery and the ending was a little sad but relevant to love...Bravo...:)

[PP]

Thank you Sami:)) that is the message obscurely hidden in this poem! Love in the beginning is picturesque but then who knows what! Thank you for reviewing :)

[Sami Khalil]

I felt that...You are welcome...:)

[PP]

My pleasure :) as always

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)..............

[PP]

.........:)

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha............

[PP]

It won't let me put just a smiley apparently it needs 10 characters!!!!!!!

[Sami Khalil]

There is a bug in the system..........:)

[PP]

Hahaha I am sure there is one!!! Guess you've hacked some codes lol

[quinfinn]

no bug, it was implemented to end the stat trashing by some unscrupulous attention hogs

[Sami Khalil]

OK. Good to know...Thank you Quinn...:)

[PP]

OMG!! There is a lot to this then?!?!

[Sami Khalil]

:)::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::

[PP]

Hahahahaaaaaaaaaa!

[quinfinn]

the best defense is to not ask for points on your writes....reviews only