Blue Sand..Saffron Sea..

 I sat by the saffron sea

Its reflection hit my eyes 

As I soaked 

more and more 

of the velvet sunlight 

So purple that its flash 

melted the blue sand 

The golden leaves of a

distant maroon tree 

Flew by my me

I sat there eagerly waiting 

for the white night sky 

In my hollow body..  

 

Reviews

[Leslie Philibert]

Fine write, full of colour, with unusual imagery..

[PP]

Thank you Leslie, glad you enjoyed it :)

[Pete Langley]

You create a vivid mind picture with your words, Prathama. Lovely poetry. P.

[Pete Langley]

You create a vivid mind picture with your words, Prathama. Lovely poetry. P.

[PP]

Thank you Pete as always :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

like rita said...the color use is wonderful...i saw the image before seeing the picture...i don't think you need the pic...the words give us the photograph just as well...

nicely described..

jacob

[PP]

Thank you Jacob :)

[s y e]

This was lovely, it was beautifully written. Well done!

~ Noodle

[PP]

Thank you Noodle..glad you enjoyed it :)

[Rita L. Sev]

You used color imagery wonderfully here; I could see this picture through your words before I actually "saw" it. A light and lovely read!

[PP]

Thank you Rita..I am glad you enjoyed it hun :)

[quinfinn]

gorgeously painted imagery and a general feeling of euphoria abound in this masterful write. superb!

[PP]

Thank you Quin, I am absolutely flattered :)

[quinfinn]

it is wonderful poetry, dear lady

[PP]

Thank you again, Quin :)

[quinfinn]

a pleasure, most sincerely!

[PP]

:)

[Clockwork]

The colors really pop in this piece. That really makes it a true visual journey that takes the reader right int the scene. Those colors, and the beautiful things they are associated with, truly have a fructifying sort of quality. They fill what was empty, the hollow body. That was a very nice way to end.

[PP]

If you say so Christian then I believe..I love your interpretation of this poem :) Thank you..

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

The beauty outside can seem nothing if not felt it inside...

i love this poem :)

[PP]

Thank you hun...you are so right in saying what you've said :)

[Sami Khalil]

"melted the blue sand

The golden leaves of a

distant maroon tree

Flew by my me

I sat there eagerly waiting

for the white night sky"
A great read and write...:)

[PP]

Thank you Sami...just painting a different world :)

[Sami Khalil]

I noticed ...You are welcome...:)