Anxious wreckage..

Pythonic maliciousness of distrust 

Gulps peace of mind: 

Piece by piece..

Churns thoughts in every direction 

Leaving no traces 

                                .....for the sake of feeling.. 

Angry vision of brokenness 

The viewer intends to see:

Through smoky kaleidoscope of the heart 

At its rotten glory..

Gluey emotions that stink, 

With who knows what poison..?:

Form rapids of turmoil in venomous veins..

Spilling disorder in pure vanity..

May be the beholder likes to enjoy: 

Creepiest feeling of anxiety

and the wreckage it brings along..

   

Reviews

[quinfinn]

there is a lot of truth in this poignant and stellar write, laced with gentle euphemism and skillful imagery, it is a swan song to the rigors of anxiety and depression. well penned!

[PP]

Thank you Quin, much appreciate your review :)

[Clockwork]

Anxiety is truly horrible, especially if it is brought on by someone else. I especially thought that your first lines really described anxiety well. I would say the first two: "Pythonic maliciousness of distrust/
Gulps peace of mind" are my favorites. I think that is sort of the feeling one gets when having a panic attack. Also, your alliteration in certain lines also conveyed the overall mood you were going for.

[PP]

Thank you Christian for this ever so detailed review...it is truly amazing :) I have had few anxiety attacks in the past..years ago but I know the feeling of jaws locking and all that disaster! Hope this poem has conveyed the trauma..

[Sami Khalil]

"Piece by piece..

Churns thoughts in every direction

Leaving no traces

.....for the sake of feeling..

Angry vision of brokenness

The viewer intends to see"
A marvelous read and write...:)

[PP]

Thank you Sami..as always :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[PP]

:)

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)

[PP]

:)

[Sami Khalil]

:):):)