Desert Rose: Part 1

The Search has begun!

Drowning in the smoke

Of a midnight's fog 

Crystals of sand

Wrapped around the tempest's hand 

Glittering dust of gold 

Shining and twinkling 

as they fall from above 

Of shooting stars and their luck 

She doesn't care 

Walking along the Destiny's path 

Leaving footprints like scars 

Crushing pebbles and rocks 

And anything that comes along

To the distant horizon 

Her journey has begun 

The ghost lights are gearing up 

Wearing their suits made out of fireflies 

In her welcome..getting ready are the bedouins

Cooking up a feast 

of smoked camel relish 

Elixir of life; they will serve later 

in a glass made of ice..

In condition..

She has to feed the bedouin master's soul 

With molten petals of the rarest desert rose..

So she begins her hunt in the vastness 

in search of minimalistic life..

scavenges bed rocks, snake holes and dunes 

Puts every spec to inspection..

In the desert with no men 

She fights for her life..

                                           .......Click here for Part 2  

   

Reviews

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I love this very awesome must say :) going to continue:)

[prince]

Prathma. This is so well written i must say. You have showed a new approch to the concept of imagination. So well written.
Do check out my short story and contribute your valuable reviews. All the best.
Regards
prince

[PP]

Thank you Price, I will surely like to read up your thoughts :)

[Chandler bing]

I wish I could write like you seriously bro brilliant work.

[Clockwork]

This is a beautiful write for freedom and Independence. I especially liked the bits about the grains of sand glittering gold and the suits worn by the ghost lights. It sounds like a good start to an expansive journey of self discovery, and exploration of the world.

[Jack...]

very beautiful my friend. This has a dreamlike quality to it. My mind was transported to this very place you have described. On to part 2

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and mythical story. I like the character and her journey. I like the visions and thoughts create by your strong description of her journey. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Ami Bovurd]

Dedly. Luv smoked camel. LOL

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Great knowledge that is portrayed here, metaphors are rich as is the language...
top quality!!!!

well done so far :D

[Leslie Philibert]

What I like here is the metaphorical richness. Fine job

[PP]

Thank you Leslie :)

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Splendid read and write. Can't wait for part deux.

[PP]

Thank you so much Brandon, just posted the second part couple of minutes ago :)