A Stale Morning Fever

Just a less than 5 minute spared random piece of thought.

A stale Morning

Sheets from last night 

Reminiscent of a dreadful nightmare 

or is it, 

Effect of a mesmerizing dream? 

Sigh of relief it is, 

or is it, 

Sigh of despair? 

For the sleeping is over

Eyes are no longer shut wide open. 

No more dreams or nightmares

It is all over. 

For it is the stale morning indeed 

Wake up,

Keep the eyes shut wide open 

You don't want your vision to perch on horrible reality 

You don't want your heart to catch a cold

You're hell lot of a dreamer 

Don't catch the stale morning fever. 

Reviews

[Becca Bishop]

Very nice...this reminded me of how much I really hate the morning. I really loved the lines, "No more dreams or nightmares/ It is all over./ For it is the stale morning indeed". Nice job :) :D :D :D

[Faffy]

oh how this brings to mind my mondays! =P haha great poem! loved it, highly captivating and strngley serious =)

great write =)

Roshan

[PP]

Thanks Roshan, always a pleasure to have you here :)

[Zerth]

Not sure what more I could say good write nice read.

[PP]

Thanks Zerth :)

[Allan]

Prathama, I liked this as well, I love that term 'eyes shut wide open' very powerful image
Good Work !

[PP]

Thank you Allan :)

[DrD]

Captivating word usage to describe the doldrum of so many mornings. I enjoyed this for its earthy, easily related theme. Well constructed and delivered to be a truly enjoyable read.

[PP]

Thank you D for all your kind words, glad you liked it:)

[Elizabeth Marie O'neil-..]

Ohhh! Very nice! I love it and I am very familiar with the stale morning fever. Nice job and good write!

[PP]

Thank you Elizabeth, I am glad you liked it :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Reality does bite and it has sharp teeth.. very much enjoyed this poem...

You don't want your vision to perch on horrible reality
You don't want your heart to catch a cold
You're hell lot of a dreamer

Love that part.

[PP]

Thank you Cowboy, much appreciated :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

My pleasure.

[PP]

:)

[Anna]

i like the "catch a cold" to "morning fever"
I also really like the "eyes are no longer shut wide open" It gives this a lot of depth and plays nicely on opposites. Very good.

[PP]

Thank you Anna for your kind words:)

[Sir Jaykom]

The title says it all. and your words did that title justice.

[PP]

Thank you Jaykom :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

in dreams we accomplish, love works out, all those good things...

in reality we are alone, and life feels stale and uncompromising.

nice idea here...like the play on words with "eyes shut wide open" rather than "eyes wide shut"

the dreamer wakes up to reality...

the next to the last line seems to be missing something..it is a little trippy...

i like the conflict between nightmare and good dream...which one was it...perhaps waking up was a good thing, not a bad thing...

i have woken from both...and the sigh has gone either way.

jacob

[PP]

Thank you Jacob for such an elaborate review. Its amazing when you actually think that every night you close your eyes and go to sleep, you might have a rosy sweet dream experience or come face to face with a horrible nightmare.

I love it how you've said that you've woken up from both and sigh has gone both ways.

Thanks for visiting again:)