Edge of a Cliff: She lost her grip!

She lost her grip..

She stood on the edge of a cliff, 

She was clinging on to her lover and hater 

He was clasping her tighter than ever 

He was facing the gorge 

She could see nothing because her eyes were closed. 

He could see a rising from the depth beneath the hanging cliff 

He could see the dark monster waking up 

He could hear distant rumbling of the stones underneath 

The black beast spread out its numerous arms 

Just like the branches of a Banyan tree

"It is the awakening of the beast 

Rising of the dark" he professed to himself 

He knew it was the sleeping beast's abode 

From legendary myth

Hidden under untouched rocks beneath the cliff. 

Before he could think, say or move 

The giant has risen 

Its face aligned with his 

It's smirking with a sense of a dirt filled pride 

It's sending heart aching scornful messages to him 

Through his eyes. 

It's face he couldn't stand 

He clinched his jaws in desperate spite 

And with rage, 

He shouted...

She was unaware of the happening 

Oblivious to the obvious. 

She knew not she was caught between 

The rage of who she is holding on to 

And the devil behind.  

He shouted...

She was frightened..

With the inertia of the sudden shock

Her feet abruptly moved with her shaking body. 

Before she knew 

She had lost her grip on the edge of the cliff. 

Before he knew 

He was holding on to her palm 

Sparing all his might to pull her up-tight,

As she was dangling precariously 

Struggling to catch a breath and stay alive. 

She was now hanging from the edge of the cliff. 

The black monster was witnessing this scene 

With two of its many arms crossed 

With foul intention, of course! 

Author's Note

This is my newest adding on to the series, please leave a review: good or bad!!

Much love

Prathama

Reviews

[Allan]

very dark ! Love it

[PP]

Thanks Allan, the next one to this series is going to be darker I suppose lol..

[Lover Of Words]

Great

[PP]

:)

[Lover Of Words]

:)

[AYVID N]

Great build-up you gave the story there! I was on the edge till the last line.Wonder what happens next!

[PP]

Thanks Divya, hold on because there is a lot more to come:)

[Coyote Poetry]

A action pack poem. Filled with emotion and fear. The strong description create some wild visions. Nice flow of thoughts in the poem led and held reader to the last word. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[PP]

Thank you ever so much Coyote :)

[amarlaksh]

wow great write Prathama!

[PP]

Thank you Amar, much appreciated :)

[DrD]

I sense a social message here, a representation of real events forced into mythological forms. This is, of course, an old style of writing in India and while some people believe it requires imagination to understand, the truth is one needs to know the culture from which it springs. An interesting weave of references creating meanings and indictments that cannot be called an enjoyable read, but certainly one demanding second or third readings and then some reading between the lines.

[PP]

Thank you D for such a precise review of my writing. Guess I never made a conscious effort to introduce a mythical character to my series, but now that you've said it, I can really see a connection. I am so very pleased that you've got such a degree of understanding and knowledge of old Indian writing. I've never had a chance to experience old Indian writing myself because of the language barriers, but have heard stories as I grew up. In fact the whole of Hindu religion does not rest upon any particular religious books unlike Christianity or Islam. Hindus follow many books and the books are all legendary myth such as the Ramayana and Mahabharata. And you are very right in saying that old Indian writing is a representation of real events forced into mythological forms and its seeks imagination to experience the true essence of the writing itself. Thank you again D.

Much Respect
Prathama

[Becca Bishop]

BWAHAHAHAH!!! Sorry. I don't really know what that was...
This is super good!!! There's got to be more!!! Right? Right?! RIGHT!!!!!?????

[PP]

There is definitely more coming Becca. Thank you, thank you and thank you for your lovely comment x

[C.R.Turner]

Wow, this is epic stuff! Great writing! :)

[emmajoy]

I've read this twice and see your words as a movie, the battle between life and death, decision.. it's a graphic piece of writing, line after line flowing smoothly, yet containing a deep rooted fear. The final stanzas are quite terrible.

'.. As she was dangling precariously ~ Struggling to catch a breath and stay alive.'

[PP]

Thank you so much Emma for not just reading it once but twice! I am glad you coul visualise this piece and most importantly feel the words. Your reviews mean a lot to me, Edge of a Cliff is a series of poem I am writing to capture some of the incidents that have happened or are happening around me, will look forward to your reviews on the earlier poem if you get a chance to read them.

Thank you & Much love

Prathama

[Anna]

I enjoy the "he" "she" back and forth. It really ilistrates the image and tells you whats going on in their heads.

[PP]

Thanks Anna:) I truly appreciate your review..