Hidden Beneath the Shell

" It cannot simply be explained, its complexity is derived from a corrupt world that tarnished its magnificent hues of transparent white. Soon it was dark and hard, solidified and sealed, transformed into a defense mechanism, a place of wavering comfort, somewhere seclude and deserted, loneliness, sadness and a great depression brought about by a cruel world only while having to learn how to be your own hero in order to save yourself. A social construct, an unsound mindset, brought about by external influences, external penetration of words of harsh tongues. It encased a developing embryo of one’s own self and defining what it is to be a “real man”   hidden with a smile by day to night was a wary soul of contemplation of participation overwhelms its shy nature only to be compensated by love…but rarely. Extended to the heavens in a daze of moonlit stars, among the great abyss of the night sky under this shell a dreamer of the most intricate detail beautiful, whimsical, magical bounded by that passion. Seemingly brilliant grand in statue, exhibited by a defining confidence unique and unmistakably to one’s self .Within this new vibrancy, for the  hues of great white light regaining its luminosity to the awe of a doubtful world FOREVER will it be that beacon of hope 

BY: Peter Jeffrey

Author's Note

I would like to know what you all think about this piece imk new to this so dont be to harsh lol

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

More then poetry. Powerful and worthwhile words shared.
" Soon it was dark and hard, solidified and sealed, transformed into a defense mechanism, a place of wavering comfort, somewhere seclude and deserted, loneliness, sadness and a great depression brought about by a cruel world only while having to learn how to be your own hero in order to save yourself. "
The above lines. Hard and realistic truth. Thank you Peter for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Sami Khalil]

This was really good. You have creativity spill from your pen...Bravo...........

[-Scribe in Style-]

This is an excellent piece, you have clearly expressed an deep idea and there is so much meaning between the lines, the repetition, rhyme, imagery and the powerful vocabulary.. it really brings out your title.. I love the idea your are bringing out.
Why have you chosen the layout to be prose? After the commas, for effect, and shortness, or a break in thought, consider using a new line.. Set it out as a poem if that is what you intend it to be.
However, I can really feel emotion whilst reading.
Great piece of work!

[MrBooyay]

Excellent writing, you capture details very well. The imagery of this is very nice, and you share some very hopeful words here. Good stuff!

[Micheal Abraham]

THANKs i appreciate the review

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is a beautiful piece of writing my fellow trini.You have very descriptive lines .

[Micheal Abraham]

thank you :)

[A wright]

THIS...I love it, i dont even know, theres just something about it i keep reading it over and over. Keep up the good work!!

[Micheal Abraham]

tHANK U and i will

[Karleem Johnson]

WOW!! I LOVE THIS ONE!!! Very very good!! :D

[Micheal Abraham]

thankss for the review

[Andre Beard]

Its a interesting piece. Very descriptive. At the beginning I first thought of something bionic being created. The next idea was a social correlation towards what society makes of someone. The third piece lost me, i wasn't linking what was the thing that make you "shine" and gave you confidence. Overall, this entry made me think of a Normal individual that went through trials to be the person he/she wants to be.

[Micheal Abraham]

thank you for your opinion much appreciated