Mist and the sleeper

I don't want to shut my eyes.

Something's here,
In this wet road,
In these wet grasses,soft and low.

I look over the vast field,
A jigsaw puzzle by the farmers hands,
Mud and wet,
A canvas for the setting sun,
Yellow,red,orange and gray:
Mix;
And let the air flow.

I set my eyes at the east:
Night's crawling in,
And the stars are knocking the heaven;
In dark deep blue.

Here,let the mist unfold,
And let the cold embrace,
And when the Moon arrives,
Let silence overtake.

When i shut my eyes-
Let the owls sing,
And let the dew fall over me:
Replacing my eye-shed misery.

And let me sleep.

Reviews

[Groovy]

nice read.

[Boldpen]

A Very pretty write.
The flow of the poem was very soothing and words used to describe twilight, extremely beautiful, Loved It!
Great Job!

[Seshat Nidaba]

There was a deep lyricism in this that couldn't but help make me pause and linger so, strong strong ending, that's how to do it.

[V]

I really like the tone of this one :) so opaque in a way...I like the last two lines best :)

[BeccaB]

love the structure and the flow its a grat poem ^_^

[Cassie Fraga]

very nice use of image!! makes me want to take a peaceful nap... ahahahaha!!
love the flow on this great read!!

[Reeti]

i admire the narrative technique being used in this poem as though u're delineating a story. The imagery portrayed here is vivid. the ending is uber. u have underscored the beauty of nature's in various contours. then, in the ending u mention how deeply you are connected to that picturesque, tranquil scenery or atmosphere u expect to find with your eyes closed.

[Johnnie]

Beautiful piece of work.I sense a heart yearning for some kind of peace here.

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Really lovely writing. Keep it up. Do u like to read mine to Anguish and Lets change the World!