Mountains Left

Mountains Left

Scarred hearts
lonely souls
Parents without hope
Kids without goals

Orphaned dreams
Fires burning low
Spirits blown away
Dinner an empty bowl
Faith dismantled
Honest folk in a bind
Crowns old and rusted

Mountains left
unclimbed.

Reviews

[Pajci]

Oh, your way with words in poems is awesome! There are lines that I would never think of, such as, "Dinner an empty bowl" or the last line, "Mountains left unclimbed."

The period at the end really gave me a sense of finality too.

Great job on this piece Mr. Kato :'D

[~]

I really like the depth of this poem. It is a great analysis of a generation passing away, leaving their hobbies untouched, because the dreams were missing. A very great title!!

[Owen J Kato]

Yeah thanks! It's a sad tale I guess. But someone will end up climbing mountains again. I just wish the baby boomers would retire so everyone else has a shot at making a fair wage in the world!

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

Hmm I really like this, it has a nice flow when reading it. When I saw the title first I thought it was going to describe mountains, then I was wondering if it was about someone lost in the woods. Is there a hidden story within this piece? Either way, it was still a nice read.

Good Job

[Owen J Kato]

Yeah! It's about people too afraid to climb their mountains due to anxiety and those old rusted crowns are the ones that came before them who say aren't useful anymore but still keep the throne cuz new people wont push them off. (Baby boomers retire) lol. Thanks!

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

lol oh I see, ^^ You're welcome!