"TWO NIGHTS IN ONE DAY"

I felt enthralled as I was writing this piece...

This Night is seemingly too long,
as i sit espying from my window,
alone with the shadows
And Voices.
I see the Night falling
as darkness takes its shape
And Structure,
the Night is Made.

A Baring Owl Screams
from the back of the Fence,
alerting every one of
the witching hour
And the Moonlight moves on,
shining and glistening,
Radiating the dark night.
The Sky holds no guiding Star
tonight
And men Sleep beneath
A
Strange Moonlight.

This Night is traveling too far
As Anguish takes the better half of me,
I sit in sorrow and illusion,
Fighting a thousand fears,
that troubles me without a smile.
I plunge into the Night
Saddened
The Night has swallowed
My Glory
and here i am in dismay.

Two Nights born from
A
hopeless day,
where pain and sorrow
visits with their
twisted hands,
Strangling and Manacling me,
Who can Save a Wandering Soul?
Where he searches for the other
part of himself.

Where
two nights merge as one
and a long journey emerges.
Two Nights in one day,
Where my Screams Reverse back to me
And
all i hear are voices
Of Silence.

This Night is tortuous and treacherous,
This Night is so far from home,
This Night may never end soon,
This Night may last forever,
We may not Awaken.


Ovi Odiete, 2015©

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

Your words remind me of those that I write of pathos, and of those times when all hope seems abandoned; when the night actually seems as if it were 2, when the day feels as if it is perhaps only 1/2 because the darkness, and sadness is so overwhelming that the hours of light just aren't enough to make the night be as it should. The thought of one's screams that reverse back to one, and the voices of silence that are really not heard at all captures the essence of your words. I like your style, the repetition, the format all which create a very, very interesting read!

[Ovi-Odiete]

Thank you so much.............

[-inactive now-]

Very dark and melancholic, I sense a lot of wretchedness and a pained heart in the words.
Nicely written. :)

[Ovi-Odiete]

Thank you so much my Friend, Josiah.....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

give us a touch of Plath here...i see her sitting before the light of day, during her writing time...being excited by the muse but periled by life's depression---that darkness that put her in a situation where she felt two dark nights for each light of day.

[Ovi-Odiete]

I really appreciate this......

[softlyfall]

Very very good poem. There are some descriptive phrases that shine with excellence.. watching the night fall, as though it tumbled out of Heaven... strange moonlight creeping, moving- eerie and atmospheric.
I will be honest though and say that I would eliminate some of the end, the last 5 lines I mean. They are much weaker than the rest of the poem, less descriptive and more melodramatic. Maybe reduce it to two lines, giving it much more impact:
The tortured night is so far from home'
We may never awaken

[Ovi-Odiete]

Thank you do much for a sincere review, I'll edit it soon....