The Rags Of The Street~

Graffiti inspired me.

The colourful bliss that we miss

The creative world we diss

Youth mark their territory

To tell us a story

As a puzzle you imagine the timeline

That has been written on a sign

The details brought out

Brings the drought to a peaceful doubt

The design gives flavour

Majority live from the poor

Sitting on the floor

They want to show a story

On the dark and lonley door

Graffiti artists

See from the darkest

They dont have to solve everything on their list

With the violence of a fist

The amazing hand work

Leaving the mind to think

What to do next

Or just let their dreams go down the sink

Some leave labels 

Known as a tag

As they walk around

While them pants sag

Known as the rags of the street

The streets left in colour

Leaving behind stories

For the ones who dont understand

What the artists live

We still love to hate

The artists dont care

They still go ahead

Leaving the deep marks

Upon the wall

Reviews

[Jess]

I really liked this, and I'm going to sound like I know what I'm talking about when I'm not much of a poet, but I found that I was able to get better poetry written when I wasn't so focused on rhyming every line. Poetry should still have a flow to it, but rhyming every word I found to be a waste of my energy. This poem had a few really good stanzas and I really liked the idea

[Overrated-World]

Thank you very much :)
I just like to do my own thing. But thanks means alot.

[KeeD]

Love your ability to rhyme and this had great expression and meaning. Cool write.

[Dream Mistress]

great realy good

[Overrated-World]

Thank you heeps :)

[Dream Mistress]

welcome

[Carolann Dowsett]

This is great, I love the way that you portray life from the teenagers point of view. Well done.

[Overrated-World]

Thank you :) x

[Brielle Cartny]

I like it!! Gives perspective of people we do not normally think about.

[Overrated-World]

Thanks heeps. Means alot getting good reviews. :)

[Jordan's Back]

This is an excellent expression, full of hard experience and life.

[Overrated-World]

Thank you.!! :)

[Jordan's Back]

your welcome

[InsanityWriter]

Great job. :) This one was really good. (:

[Overrated-World]

Thank you so much means alot :)

[Lewis Davis-Norman]

The figurative language in this is so creative and refreshing, love it!

[Overrated-World]

Thank you so much, i was a bit worried on this one because i didn't think it was good. Thank you Lewis. Love the feedback.