HARMONY IS LOVE

A new style, I guess I got to mess up few times before I get it!

Hear the tear dropping out of my eye

As my blood tells my heart another lie

Rocks and walls surround my mind

Make my eyes go blind

Over that all you stood

Narrating my story to the croud

You said it clear you said it loud



If you love me you shall bleed

Slowly and painfully for earth you'll feed



Love is harsh and I shall know

O' my heart won't you just blow?

Variety of choices love offer, but

Eventually you'll have to suffer

Author's Note

I know this is not the kind of harmony any one would like for but it's a harmony, not good not peacefull, but still LOVE IS HARMONY and HARMONY IS LOVE !

Reviews

[Ria Benthil]

Acronyms are challenging to wield into creativity, but the unique perspective on love succeeded that challenge. The rhyme scheme gave the soft spoken atmosphere, but it still contributes to the message. To my relief, the speaker matured the writing style with the content. Instead of perceiving love as flawless, the writer recognized realistic elements of affection. The most appealing factor about the poem is how the writer has configured an otherwise common phrase into something authentic.

[chyenne]

nice poem or watever it awesome

[Julie Beth]

this was really cool good job :)

[Truman S. Booth]

I love acrostics. If you want to progress in this newfound form, I suggest reading some of Lewis Carroll's acrostics. He was a master, constructing perfectly structures DOUBLE acrostics (the first and last letters of the lines make words). And they were often riddles. Brilliant poet.

This is an excellent work as well. Good message. Well done.

[Alicia Schroeder]

Great veiw of the other side of harmony. Nice peice

[Escape My Fate]

Loved it. Keep it up

[Kate Hunter]

good job. Keep writing!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

so cool! most people try to take this concept of acronyms and use it and they usually fail because they lack the creativity, but you most definitely succeeded in making this poem unique and enjoyable.

[Mauricio Montoya]

I like the format; I think there may be an error in the third line. (Serounder) = surrounder. now as far as Harmony I can relate to that cause I’ve been there and have been going back and forth with how to define it. Nice work.

[Norma M Sutton]

You seem to have figured this style out pretty well.