For that I sit on the shore

For that I sit on the shore

A Poem by OR
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Written on the shore right next to my college...

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For blues is what I choose
For I play but always lose
For I never fight but I end up with a bruise

For I welcome a new day
For I have always something to say
For I hope and I pray

For I need a place to cry
For I never lie
For I'll eventually die

For deception is our age
For "civilization" is our cage
For we have anger but with no rage

For rocks break the waves in two
For skies makes the clouds blue
For I have no solution and have no clue

For that, and more
I'll be the one sitting on the shore
For that and more
When the doors are closed, open you'll find my door

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Note for reviewers : I've reversed some of the images in this poem like;
"For skies makes the clouds blue" While clouds are making skies white
.... I just wanted to make the poem feels as much disturbed as possible because that's how I was disturbed...

© 2011 OR


Author's Note

OR
Now I think I maybe not that bad... Thanks every one for the real encouraging reviews...

Thank you "Truman S. Booth" for the grammatical check

@Intern'l Shultzfeather : I guess this poem is about how disturbed life could be and how people just don't accept true so truthful will end up a lone and away from all the others... The shore, in my case.

Thank you everyone, really ...

Peace

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Okay, honestly speaking, I did not find the level of this poem to be extremely good, but the little messages in it were lovely!

I especially liked,

"For deception is our age
For "civilization" is our cage"
"For we have anger but with no rage"

really brilliant lines there amigo. keep writing!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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wow how can you say this is not one of your best and that you are not good? I think this is a wonderful piece of work. It kept me hooked the whole time.
Very beautiful!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

you say its not one of your best, but i disagree i really like this one. i can definitely feel the disturbance in this poem, but even so the flow was great and it kept me hooked. this is very cool!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I fought many battles on the ocean. The water give you a strange peace. Just watching the sea allow us to find a new path. I like the ending. A open door is necessary to allow opportunity to overtake the old one's. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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. what are you saying ? ... this is an awesome piece of work ... it's a soulful chant and very poignant ... and creative and innovative ... and it's always the best people in the universe who keep their door open ... this is that gem of a poem from a gem of a person ... absolutely beautiful ...

Posted 13 Years Ago


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