The "Le Temps" girl

This is very personal poem, hope you like it :)

If life was nothing but a flashlight or a small glow
And love was nothing but a stormy weather or a huge flow

If by a miracle I was blind and now I can see
Because even without seeing your face you got into me

I know the words are too short and too crazy to say
But I'm not going to lose a moment of my life no way

Life is too short to lose it on regret
And love is a game, you're the bookie and I'm ready to place a bet

Between you and me there's a long way
Nothing to do, but much to say

I'm nothing but a fighter on a field
but for you I'll throw the sword and the shield

Read this and I'll live in your heart for a while
Then I'll die like a name dies on a lost file

Reviews

[DrumMajorPod]

Excellent work.. I really enjoyed this piece. To me, it was almost a comparison of sorts--a comparison of real love vs. fake love, in ways. It was short, sweet, and to the point--to use an old cliche--but it was exceptionally effective. The imagery was very real, very concrete, and easy to imagine. An excellent work.

[Linear]

Good work, though I wasn't to keen on the last line, but thats just me, the poem is very good. 7 points

[Geralyn Miller]

Interesting, your word choices make the urgrncy to experience life at it's fullest quite evident. In all, a very appealing poem.

[Intern'l Shultzfeather]

Not quite a Le Temps Detroit Tout cause you continue to fly with superb virtue and intention. Nice lift.

[Shelly Braen]

A beautiful write. ^_^
It captures such affection and devotion. Love has the power to turn us into many things. You captured it quite well.

[Light]

love...what a beautiful idea. i love the comparison in the first two lines; life is a tiny flicker of light and love is this vast tempest. life is secondary to love!

[Elwina]

Very beautiful poem.
Ive loved that line very much "Nothing to do, but much to say"
Very touching.

[Bard Constantine]

Nice job with expression of your emotions... the simplicity adds to the depth of the piece, nicely written...

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

love the way you play with words and usage~ that last stanza speaks volumes about the temporary aspects of love of todays~

[OR]

@Everyone : Thanks a lot
And forgive me for not reviewing a lot but I hardly get connection here, and I'll read as much as I can

@Intern'l Shultzfeather : lool I wouldn't for sure encourage fornication because I believe in true platonic unphysical love and because I'm Muslim too :)