Born for you

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Your love is the hardest game, but I'll play
Or is it the sweetest, I just don't know what to say
I can say you're on my level, but I'll be a liar
We're all humans and you're an angel; that's so much Higher

I don't say it's a game I can't play
I love you, honey, this is all I can say
And baby please don't go away
I know I'm boring, And that you won't love me; no way !
I can't blame you, You've designed my way
In this life you were my guide, I thank you
But please don't go and stay

Love, I'm going to pray
That you're going to love me one day
Even if you can't stay with me today
I'm sure my love will bring you back one day
I have one million things in my head that I can't say
When we meet, darling, I hardly say Hi!
You're every thing in this life and for you I cry

This won't be the first poem written for you
And I'm sure it won't be the last too
But please remember that I was born for you
Please remember that all I can offer is my pure love for you

Author's Note

This is for my girl ... Still waiting for you love :)

Reviews

[Liza]

the first line is genuis and somewhat torturous but it felt like the lover needed the challenge to experience the bliss....so many hurdles to feel the reward...will the behavior ever break free...that is what this made me think of...great declaration of love...

[Amit Parmessur]

I do suggest you submit a couple of your best works to Golden Apple. We'll certainly consider you if you are interested in being published.
We look at submissions the year round.
Regards,
Golden Apple Ezine Team
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[Miss Coral]

I too would consider loosening up on the rhyme scheme; it's somewhat distracting from the piece itself.
Having said that, this was really well done. The emotion is very well expressed and really stands out in this poem. Great job. :)

-Coral-

[OR]

@ all : Thank you for the reviews
and as I've said english is my 3rd language so that's why I have lots of gramatical mistakes
And @Bard Constantine :
"I'm sure she'll appreciate it"
Yeah maybe once I'll find her
This is for the girl I love but just can't find ...

[C]

Beautiful and so sweet.

[.]

. very poignant, sweet and lovingly written ... good luck ... :) ...

[Intern'l Shultzfeather]

You are definitely a heady glorious nano away from becoming a star in ovblivionae. Did enjoy seeing your game.

[Bard Constantine]

Beautiful sentiments for the one you love, I'm sure she'll appreciate it. As far as the structure, I wonder if this would be better in free verse... sometimes when one is confined to rhyming, it can box in the expression. There's more to it than just making the last words of a sentence rhyme... it also has to have a rhythmn... a bounce of sorts that really can be heard if you read the poem aloud. That's something that took me a while to nail, so don't think I'm just picking on you. This is good work, keep on writing...