Clouds in Autmn Sky

A villainelle collaboration between me and my friend Blaise Tzu.

Cumulonimbus Clouds sag heavily in the autumn sky,
The price of lost wages begin to weigh on the state.
What diet do I follow to be light enough to fly?

Hear the graffiti gutter drain sigh

feather weight messages still caught on the grate

Cumulonimbus Clouds sag heavily in the autumn sky

The sight of the sun sears away the pupil of my eye
this sensation of pain seems numb like I'm sedate
What diet do I follow to be light enough to fly?

Behind the drop, I can't afford to die

when my future''z still balancing 10 greasy plates

Cumulonimbus Clouds sag heavily in the autumn sky

Being on the grind daily I have no choice but to try
to me life's like a roller derby and I don't know how to skate
What diet do I follow to be light enough to fly?

Become Another vegetable waiting for the scythe 

or uproot our wings, smash clocks and mutate

Cumulonimbus Clouds sag heavily in the autumn sky

What diet do I follow to be light enough to fly?

 

Author's Note

We alternated stanzas and I went first...

Reviews

[TeenRomance2]

Not sure if this would count as positive, but I like it regardless. And I looked up what a Cumulonimbus Cloud is!! :-P I didn't know and was curious. I love the line "What diet do I follow to be light enough to fly?" Definitely one of the coolest lines I've read.

[awkward turtle]

impressive. i had to write a villanelle for a class a couple semesters ago, and it was by far my least favorite assignment. i enjoy reading them, sure, but i'm terrible at writing them.

that said, excellent imagery. i can envision everything as i read. it's sort of making me crave a big thunderstorm now. well done :)