Reflection

Looking in the mirror,

What is it that you see

The image of a stranger,

Staring back at me

Her eyes twinkle like stars,

Her smile never ends

She doesn't appear to be broken,

She hides her every sin

Underneath this facade,

The reflection does not show

Her heart that's bruised and broken,

What she can't let them know

Looking in the mirror,

Behind the reflection that I see

Stands a hollow girl,

The hollow girl is me

Reviews

[a schizophrenic writer]

This was very deep, and I find that I myself relates to seeing a "stranger" in the mirror. but you didn't put any punctuation, I think it would help the reader to know how fast/slow they should read and where the pauses are. other than that, it was great!!

[Average person]

thanks. and I see that now I just forget sometimes.. today has been stressful.. but I'll fix it! :)

[Kai Rollins]

Awesome!! Ahh always enjoy reading poetry like this. Brilliant really. Hollow girl. It flowed so well

I enjoyed ^_^

[Average person]

why thanks :)

[songstress]

Simply amazing. The way you utilized rhyme throughout, made your statements all the more powerful. and even though the mirror reflects something that's not there, it's as though your writing is a mirror of yourself. I mean that aspect is obvious. But, seeing these sorts of poems come out of you is like seeing a phenomenon. like watching a fair white maiden leave a mansion, only to realize that no one else sees her. You are that phantom in this piece and in all others. You are something rare and beautiful, and I thank you for this amazing work.

[Average person]

Thank you. I'm glad you appreciate my writing much like I appreciate yours. :)

[Chaz Hemsworth]

That is deep. I feel like you could have had a line concerning "seeing through" someone, because you really play off the idea of mirrors.

[Average person]

Thanks and thats a good idea.. hmm...

[Rainbow-Ribbons]

How I so understand what you have written here!!! Pretending that things are fine but feeling so cold and empty; acting out a part, hiding myself behind a facade, so sad and alone. . .

[Average person]

It's always nice to know that someone understand you.. thanks :)

[Phillip Marshall]

Wow, this is amazing. I'm not even sure if I can say anymore about it...100/100. Surely noteworthy. c:

[Average person]

Why thank you I didn't expect that :3