Wraith

A slight of faith

Lord, why do you bless me

With effects like hope, courage, and faith

When humanity appears determined

To trample my foundation and leave me a wraith?

Reviews

[bball_41]

Hello! I am new to this site, and also new to these type of reviews I have done many reviews on different websites, but on this one... well I'm just beginning, so I hope you enjoy it, and maybe learn something.
So, I love this poem! I think that it crosses a lot people's minds, and this poem can be relateable to other people. That is what you want in a poem, or any piece for that matter.
I really like how you made this poem with simplicity, so almost anyone could see an all around theme to the poem. You also made it deep, so that those who like to dig deeper have the opportunity to. I love to dig deeper, and I believe that this poem is really deep and mysterious! It leaves you questioning and wondering. That is sometimes what readers find enjoyable about a piece of writing.
So, the format is great, but something is a little out of the ordinary. I think that the punctuation is pretty good, but you have no periods, and so it makes your poem go to ways. The punctuated way and the non punctuated way. I would say choose one and go with it. That really is the only mistake I see though.
I would love to talk about your title "Wraith". The word itself is full of mystery, because not many people use that word in everyday vocabulary, so it automatically turns heads towards your piece. The word has such a great meaning which tops your poem like a cherry to a sundae.
"A ghost or ghostlike image of someone, especially one seen shortly before or after their death." is how the internet describes. So, great word choice, it adds so much character to your story!
Overall, great job! You are an amazing writer with some insane talent. If you ever need help with anything, just ask!

Have a great day!

Stay Classic!

bball_41

[Orchid]

Oops so sorry I am so late in a reply - thank you for the review.
I forgot about this place :) Again - Sorry for the late comments to your thoughtful write. I hope to get better at logging in and posting poems.

[willweb]

Very deep and so effective in expressing this torment. I really enjoyed this today Orchid.

[Orchid]

Thank you!