Heat Stroke

Flames smolder down

With ash wings contorting around bare flesh

Warping reality into a passionate conquest

Unveiling the masks

Breaking down the walls

Unchaining the modesty

In you I seek myself

With untamed and brutal thoughts

I take flight

Heat rising, sensations buzzing

Smoke to ash

Emerging a phoenix from the wreckage

Reviews

[sakshi arora]

its a good poem but if u l improvise a bit more it will be great

[OrangeSlice]

Ya I'm working on this one I'm contemplating on deleting it or warping it.. The others are complete versions this is one I'm still playing with and asylum I may add more to but for right now I like it

[sakshi arora]

:) i m excited for the new version

[MoriartyMesa]

Love the fire, but felt there could be more heat

[ron]

Wow this one heated up the page. Open yourself up to your desires passion and needs. Become who you were ment to be any way you can. Great write.

[OrangeSlice]

Exactly Ron thank you for your words of wisdom and feedback :-)

[ron]

You are most welcome OrangeSlice.

[Chris Micha]

Great job here. I loved the first three lines and the imagery. Beautiful! :)

[OrangeSlice]

Thank you I'm still working on it, I love the contorting ash wings :)