Liquor

Let me be that stranger

Ill sit waiting in your bed
Uncorseting the chains innerlacing my ribs
Lurking in the shadows, waiting to intertwine
Pound into me like the rain
Touch down on me, let me be your asphalt
No deception, no false promises
Just raw, blood sweltering animal instinct
Smiling to myself in the dark, that's my escape

Author's Note

Any critiques are welcome :)

Reviews

[m.s.early]

Power driven poetry. But I argue that liquor is entirely deception and only false promises, unlike the rest of your poem. Your imagery is uncompromising, a great escape indeed.

[Bluefire]

"Overthrowing any reason
Uncorseting the chains innerlacing my ribs
Then I will escape."
Simply strange and in a way, beautifully dark.
Well done. ^^

[Amanda Mae MacInnis]

Excellent! I understand the need to escape, no matter the vice. It beautifully solves the equation YOU+IT= YOU, JUST DIFFERENT

[FlamingPhoenix]

Very nice write! The imagery of the rain was lovely.

[ron]

Passionate, sensual, erotic. Love this poem.

[melissa]

This is awesome poem keep up the great work and keep sending me more to read i love reading them

[Chris Micha]

I didn't expect it to twist there at the end.
Beautiful work! :)

[OrangeSlice]

A good writer always has a twist :)

[A. Amos]

I enjoy this piece, especially the below line...

as if I'm a stranger waiting in your bed

Great work my dear!

[OrangeSlice]

Thank you apparently stress equals good writing lol

[Cierra Fischer]

Love it my little orangeslice!

[OrangeSlice]

Awe you joined :)

[Cierra Fischer]

Just for you. Who knows, maybe I'll post something

[OrangeSlice]

I'd like to see your writing. It's nice to be able to vent

[Cierra Fischer]

Hmm.. well I posted something that is the first thing I've written since high school and probably blows haha

[OrangeSlice]

I'm sure it doesn't blow