He is My Edward

This poem was inspired by two things: the Twilight saga, and a friend from school. tell me what you think.

He is my perfect heart's desire,

My heart's immortal seen,

My eternal love embodied,

The perfect human-being.

 

His light brown hair is eye catching.

His smile makes my head spin.

The way he smells is breath-taking.

His voice makes me grin.

 

He is my climbing addiction,

My ever-calling drug.

His life is my everything,

I need his simple hug.

 

His golden eyes are truly calming,

His music so serene,

His words my endless lullaby,

His perfections all that's seen.

 

He is my heavenly waking dream,

His face and love I try to see,

When I said I didn't want him,

It was the blackest kind of blasphemy,

 

He is the protector of my heart,

He saves me from myself,

My knight in shining armor,

The keeper of my health.

 

Does he know how important he is?

Does he know how much I care?

Would he trust his life with me?

Would his answer scare?

 

Does he know how much he's wanted?

Of this I am not sure.

Would I spend with him forever?

For this question my answer's pure.

 

He is not the love of my life,

For thats too short by far.

He is the love of my existence,

My love's immortal scar.

 

The outside world holds no interest,

Without him to be there,

I can't exist in a world without him,

Too impossible to bare.

 

He is my Edward through and through,

My heart's never-ending scream,

My eternal love embodied,

The perfect human-being.

Reviews

[cheeeeese]

W-o-w. I can certainly see how this is tied with Twilight, it brings back the memories of when I sat locked up in my room all day just daydreaming and reading those books :P But really, this poem was brilliant and like 'Vesa Lee' said, this piece can stand on its own. It's really good. 100%

[Vesa Lee]

Amazing.
Whether it has to do with Twilight or not, this piece can stand on it's own.

[OceanTropic]

"He is the protector of my heart, he saves me from myself."

Powerful words. This is exactly how I feel about my boyfriend. They just bring out this part in you, they make you realize how important you are, how different you are, it's truly touching.

"He is not the love of my life...he is the love of my existence." Also very powerful.

[Trisha]

Absolutely breath taking!

[ShadowHaze]

wooooooow.... I didn't know so many people had gotten into Twilight. I haven't tried writing in the Twilight version, but hells yeah I'm gonna try now! Thanks for the inspiration (all of you).

Awesome poem, awesome, awesome, awesome! I can't think of a better poem

[Aiden- Aiko- Kiyomi]

OMG tear tear tear. Wow that was beautiful. Very mature. It is beautiful.
GREAT!!!!

[Mel]

First of all, I love Twilight. I can never get enough of it, I'm absolutely in love with Edward. Second, I loved this poem! Even without thinking of Twilight, your writing is beautiful, so eloquent. You capture the emotion so well. Kudos on refering the book now and then! One of my favourite lines of all time is 'When I told you that I didn't want you, it was the blackest kind of blasphemy', and I loved seeing it in this poem, you worked it really well.

[Elana Juli Royson]

Great job firstly. Secondly, I hate twilight, but thats my opinion. This was very well written and as I was reading it I couldn't help but think of a guy friend of mine that I feel the same way about. When the reader can relate to the writing, it makes the piece so much better. Kudos! Keep writing!

[Onyx Sky]

As a person who also loves Twilight, you have done a great job of really catching the beauty of Bella and Edwards relationship, and whoever else you are crusing on. :) The only thing I would change is how you used the word blasphemy... because it usually isn't used the way you used it. Other than that it was pretty good, and rhyme always gets better with time

[Aly]

Wow.
I really like this ^^
Good job!