A Glass Disk (best, 2016 - lol)

A Glass Disk (best, 2016 - lol)

A Poem by Ookpik
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Poem I wrote for a class, assignment was to write a poem of a portrait, I thought that was lame and opted to put a spin on it.

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A glass disk

revolves around the centre

of a dimly lit room

 

It is dark

but the mirror throws around refractions

like birdseed

from a burlap sack

 

The light paints the walls and ceiling

 

Aurora borealis

across the hardwood

 

At the centre

and with each revolution

 

A picture is portrayed

 

A depiction of once past and now present

 

..

 

A young man

bent over a desk

 

A child

peering down a hole

in the ice

 

A furrow

knit into a brow

 

A boy

throwing stones

into a river

 

A bead of sweat

falling from a chin

 

A teenager

falling in love

with a girl

 

An instant tightening

at the jaw

 

..

 

The walls are alight

with the color

of an untold story

 

..

 

Scars laid over gnarled knuckles

 

birds on the breeze

 

A hand lined by labor

 

a whisper in an ear

 

Eyes downcast

 

a promise

broken by the naïveté of its maker

 

..

 

With a whir and a thrum

the rotating glass

slows to a hum

 

It gets quiet

and the echo lingers

like ripples

after a fallen drop

 

The silence resonates throughout the room

 

A footprint

across an untouched field of snow.

 

Or the scent of a candle made doubtful

of it's own innate ability to glow

© 2021 Ookpik


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Ookpik - This was a poetic kaleidoscope of life events presented with cinematic impact, invention and imagination. I loved it. Namyh

Posted 7 Years Ago


Ookpik

7 Years Ago

Namyh - Thank you for the kindly worded review :)
Three things.

"Aurora borealis across the hardwood" This is beautiful.

The imagery you make here is unbelievable.

You are amazing at this!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ookpik

8 Years Ago

Thank you! I'm still working towards improvement but am happy that you liked it : P
This is a very nice poem! Thank you for sharing this. Though I don't know which portrait you used for this, I love the words you chose and the image you created with them, prompting the reader to use his/her own imagination. Great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Ookpik

8 Years Ago

aha naw the assignment was to create a portrait using poetry, the painting was entirely imaginative .. read more
Ookpik

8 Years Ago

but thank you kindly :)
thaleeyaLuna

8 Years Ago

Oh right! You're very welcome.

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Added on July 15, 2016
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Ookpik
Ookpik

Yukon Territory, Canada



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