Expanding Halo

About the loss of friendship.

I feel my arm raise up
My fingers grasping for yours
You pull back
From the crimson pool
I can see your shoes
Those old scuffed up shoes
Walking away from me
I bought you those old scuffed up shoes

My halo is expanding
Standing on the concrete
All alone
Surrounding, Trapping my thoughts
Lying on that concrete
The hardest feeling
I can feel
Has nothing to do with that concrete

So lift me up,
Above that concrete
Above my halo
Above the world
Above my life
Above my hate
Above you,
You and your scuffed shoes

Author's Note

Thanks for reading...what do you think?

Reviews

[just is]

So lift me up,
Above that concrete
Above my halo
Above the world
Above my life
Above my hate
Above you,
You and your scuffed shoes

Love this stanza, this is wonderful, i like this it's very impressive it shows you can rise above from hurt

[Kiara]

a very well writen piece.......expressive : )

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

very impressive write... showing just how you were there for that person and yet somehow they abandoned you.

[Salvatore Buttaci]

I like the way you used the scuffed shoes to carry the eyes of the reader from start to finish. A good poem!

Sal

[~amanda~]

i loved the line "i bought you those scuffed up shoes"

so powerful! you gave yourself a lot of strength with this line! i hate when people write reviews that say change it! youre not writing for anyone but yourself, so there is no reason to revise it. great work! cant wait to read more!

[Wicahpi]

"So lift me up,
Above that (conctete)
Above my halo" ~ just a typo

Expressive, sad...

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