two Japanese Choka

two short Japanese Choka form posts

PEACE IN THE MIDST OF THE STORM

~Japanese Choka~

clouds in the distance

cold, grey, foreboding at dusk

white winds gather strength

to unsettle the children

who sleep securely

held safe by a mother's prayer

peace in the midst of the storm

CARESSED BY NATURE'S PAINTBRUSH

~Japanese Choka~

nature's silent call

like gentle noonday whispers

preparing for change

beneath the weeping willow

whose leaves dance softly

waiting to be the canvas

caressed by nature's paintbrush

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Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

The page is your canvas, Sharon. You paint such a lovely picture for us in the first choka. Mothers protect their children when they are young and still worry about them when they are grown. There is only so much we can do though. The second choka has such a peaceful feel to it. I enjoyed them both. You have always been good at the form poetry. Lydi**

[Miss Sharon]

Awwww! Thanks my sweet friend for a lovely review and your complimentary words which encourage me. ~Sharon

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Sharon… these Japanese Choka are soft as butterfly 🦋 wings that flutter by when flowers bloom… You play poems like a Mello Cello … tenderly, Pat

[Miss Sharon]

What a lovely thing to say Pat! Thank you ever so much my sweetie. ~Sharon

[Lisasview]

Interesting write dear Miss Sharon..
Really enjoyed it..
Lisa

[Miss Sharon]

Thanks so much for your beautiful review my friend! ~Sharon

[Lisasview]

You are so welcome..
Lisa

[Mike Keenan]

These are quite clever and steer me back to haiku. Caressed is a strange choice of words given that a paintbrush moves but I guess gently touches. I wonder about the translation. Thanks for sharing.

[Miss Sharon]

Thanks so much for your review of this work! ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the second one has such a beautiful calmness to it.
the first one makes me uneasy as I can't help thinking of those poor folks in Ukraine, dealing with
the madman.
j.

[Miss Sharon]

Thanks so much Jacob for your kind response to these forms. ~Shron

[John the Baptist]

I have little familiarity with the Asian forms, but I must say I like this one better than the haiku. Both seem to try to capture a moment in time, but the choka fleshes it out a little better, so one can get a better grasp of what is being described. The haiku, on the other hand, keeps you guessing.

[Miss Sharon]

Thanks so much for your in depth review of these forms! ~Sharon