This has a feel of part wizard of oz adventure and part dream, searching for the path we all strive to find, within that dream, that will provide the elusive answerbefore we wake. We very rarely get to start where we left off in dreams, which only adds to the mystery of dreamland itself.
Now, if only we could find the controls or instruction manual, we could make this the mantra we say before nodding off to dreamy sleeps.
Lovely flowing rhyme and almost Sing-song feel to your words, with crying moons giving it a fairy tale feel, but with a dark edge to it, which come to think of it, most fairy tales have 😀
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4 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your wonderful response to this write! ~~Sharon
I love the lonely melancholy feel of this, as reflected from observations in nature. Great rhyme & rhythm to keep the pace rolling along & I also love the little flickers of hope along the way, but in the end, the gloom fills the sky (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
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4 Years Ago
Thanks ever so much for your kind review of this write! ~Sharon
Sharon, I felt a heaviness and gloom throughout until the end. Such a surprising and refreshing end. It’s as if the robin took the weight upon its wings and carried it away. I think it’s called hope, and that’s the beauty of poems like this one.
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4 Years Ago
Thank you so much my friend for your kind remarks! ~Sharon
Meter perfect and so beautiful. The moon has much to answer for, seems to set the senses off and away, either in incredible sadness or absolute joy. Here it's the former and yet.. there's an unusual calm as if - as if emotion is - for now, controlled. The repeated phrases add a similar restraint - the feelings remain but .. .. ..
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4 Years Ago
Thank you my dear for your nice remarks on this write! ~Sharon
Melancholy captured in rhyme. The beauty of poetry lies here, where words relieve the psychic pain.
"Nothing's as it seems each day,
No sunshine fills the sky.
Clouds dot every vacant space...
And moons begin to cry."
So beautiful and sensuous.
Each one of us face a depressive setback at a point of time in our lives. When at nights our moons begin to cry. But it is so gutsy to remain firm and emerge as a victor fighting the negativity. Your lines strike a chord with almost all of us. Lots of Love❤❤
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4 Years Ago
What a beautiful and compassionate response to this write! Thank you so much. ~Sharon
This has a feel of part wizard of oz adventure and part dream, searching for the path we all strive to find, within that dream, that will provide the elusive answerbefore we wake. We very rarely get to start where we left off in dreams, which only adds to the mystery of dreamland itself.
Now, if only we could find the controls or instruction manual, we could make this the mantra we say before nodding off to dreamy sleeps.
Lovely flowing rhyme and almost Sing-song feel to your words, with crying moons giving it a fairy tale feel, but with a dark edge to it, which come to think of it, most fairy tales have 😀
Posted 4 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
4 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your wonderful response to this write! ~~Sharon
Delightful despite being somewhat sad until that final stanza and then whoooosh out of the doldrums like a bloomin rocket..... certainly enjoyed this V T Day or any day for that matter ....
Neville
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4 Years Ago
Thanks ever so much for your delightful review of this write! ~Sharon
There is a sad, but melodious, tone to your words in this one, Sharon. Grief...different every day and not the same for any two people. At times it seems to have vanished....and then it reappears with a punch. Beautifully written. Lydi**
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4 Years Ago
Thank you so much Lydi for your beautiful remarks on this write! I appreciate you. ~Sharon
My name is Sharon, I am a retired piano teacher, I love the mountains where I hike and snowshoe, have had several poems published and love to write. I also love to read almost anything I can get my ha.. more..