LOOKING FOR A PLACE

Word play.

LOOKING FOR A PLACE

My words are looking for a place
That they have never been.
The story wants adventure
And each phrase just needs and end.

The adjectives are lazy
And they want descriptive views...
Of what those nouns are doing
Sitting idle in the pews.

The sentences that are complex
Try twisting very slow,
And the verbs justy want to run away
As fast as they can go.

The action gets remembered
As a play that often lies,
While the audience is awfully bored...
And you can hear their sighs.

So I guess I'll keep on searching
For a place my words can rest...
Before they are dismembered
By erasers on my desk.
~~~

Reviews

[emmajoy]

' So I guess I'll keep on searching
For a place my words can rest...
Before .. ..

'Wonderfully witty, love the finish... and of course, you are yet another wonder of fine meter. i drool with envy!

The tale within your stanzas are finely put, Miss Sharon, and very much how one can feel, think, when trying to find perfection or something near!

[Miss Sharon]

Thanks ever so much my dear for your wonderful review of this post!

[steppenwolf]

Sharon: I love this poem, especially the end. I hope you remember me; you wrote a beautiful review of my poem called "Labor Pains." I'll keep reading...
Steppenwolf

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you so much for your lovely review my dear! ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this audience is never bored with your words...delightful play on words here...
j.

[Miss Sharon]

Thanks so much Jacob! I really appreciate you. ~Sharon

[MsJewel]

Perfect rhythm and rhyme in this well written little gem of word play. An absolute pleasure to read :) Julie

[Miss Sharon]

How nice to hear from you my dear! Thank you so much for your kindness. ~Sharon

[Pravir]

Haha . . . that was really fine but very gently and wittily craafted . . . i loved ur new way of describing parts of speech .. Specially "adjectives are lazy" made me rofl. . . . highly innovative . . . keep sharing such beautiful work . .

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you for a wonderful review! ~Sharon

[Norman 223]

So this is what anthropomorphology of words looks like. You have created an amusing ,even erudite, vision of grammatical "hide and seek" in this foray.
Loved it !!

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you ever so much Norman for your very kind review! ~Sharon

[Shabeeh Haider]

What could be worse than having words that are erased even before they are expressed.
Each word carries a thought, each word hides a tear, each word exhibits a smile, each word cleanses the heart.
Keep on playing with these words. You will never realize how far they can go.
Some reader from a far off place will feel your pain and pray for you.
And these are the very words that reach the heavens where HE hears it all.
Keep writing my friend, keep playing with words.

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you for a wonderful review of this write! You are appreciated my friend. ~Sharon