THE VEIL

A deceitful love....

THE VEIL

Hidden there beneath the veil
Your inner thoughts that do prevail
To shield you from anothers' mask
And hold you there within its grasp

Those secrets kept from loving eyes
That offer you the golden prize
Will now be lost to those who see
The games you play while flying free

Those words so smoothe and gentle be
From lips that prime and capture me
Have melted hearts like chocolate kiss
And every slave is now remiss

But someday soon the truth be known
And every spiteful lie be shown
To one who neither sees nor cares
But wallows in the demons' lair
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Reviews

[emmajoy]

In spite of its fine writing, and great meter.. this poem's draped by tragedy.. truth showing its ugly face even though veiled. Suspicion is often knowledge, often realisation. Hiding away - however superficially, is usually found out in the end. Meantime the sufferer weeps into his/her pillow.

You write superbly well, pulling at heartstrings without melodrama...

[Miss Sharon]

You are so kind my dear! Thank you for a wonderful review. ~Sharon

[emmajoy]

Youre more than welcome... the theme is such a ... tragic one, too often for real..

[Robert Haigh]

The veil usually falls, or is torn away, in the end. A well penned poetic piece.

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you so much Robert for your kind review! ~Sharon

[Mifa]

I really loved this, the rhythm and rhyme was spot-on and I loved the sing-song beauty of the poem. Keep writing Miss Sharon.

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you very much for your very kind review! ~Sharon

[Sami Khalil]

"Those secrets kept from loving eyes
That offer you the golden prize
Will now be lost to those who see
The games you play while flying free"

[Miss Sharon]

It's not often a friend quotes me as a way to say 'this is good' and I like it Sami. Thanks. ~Sharon

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)....................

[Miss Sharon]

;>)(

[Davidgeo]

Nice rhythm, clean.

Creepy and dark I think it's fantastic.

[Miss Sharon]

Thanks so much for your nice review John! ~Sharon

[Tony]

A "veil"-- a bridal veil and "those secrets kept from loving eyes"
Sounds like a adultery-- and yes, the spouse always finds out.
I like the symbolism you create with the veil imagery--
a veil is superficial and see through and can easily be pulled away.

[Miss Sharon]

Your reviews of my work are always appreciated! Thank you so much. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love is not love when it wears this kind of veil...words are just words, but the chocolate kisses melt before they reach the lips...and spite hides goodness and truth...

when the truth finally is revealed...we will know what direction, what action to take.

powerful piece, Sharon.

j.

[Miss Sharon]

And as usual my friend, you have hit the interpretative nail on the head. Thank you so much! ~SP

[Shabeeh Haider]

If it's deceitful, then it if not love. What is hidden behind the veil can only be seen and experienced with time. This is most beautifully penned and has a wonderful flow to it. I like the use of rhymes and the meter is spot on.

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you ever so much for your wonderful review of this write! Muchly appreciated. ~SP