The Faraway

The Faraway

What I saw was radiant beauty

Of smooth and perfect golden sands

That colour would change in times of sunset

To a humble pink, almost too ashamed to be adored

Its surface reflected the changing light

Yet its fair refinement grew in spite

What I saw were icy lakes

And how I longed to break their surface

To delve where no one ever journeyed

Into the depths of apperception and all-knowing

And yet I could not crack the exterior

I waded on through lakes inferior

What I saw were branches thin

They danced and twisted in the breeze

Their golden leaves called out to me

Such transcendent melody; I felt unworthy

Their gleam and glow were overwhelming

My fascination deep, unending

What I saw were dreams of dreams

“Such a place does not exist!

What you see you cannot reach”

What I sought was swift dismissed

Their words were true, I knew that so

Yet as I fool, I let hope grow.

But no matter: come the sunrise

We set sail again, the fruitless reprise.

Reviews

[Hbrook]

I really like this. Good job! I have an intupritation of what i think ot means, but if it's okay, may i ask what you wrote it to mean?

[OneAmongstMany]

What do you think it means? I'd love to hear your thoughts!

For my part, it's an attempt to convey how we so often fix our attention on something that, realistically, is unattainable. Sometimes the anticipation of something can be more beautiful than the thing itself. We can let our obsessions dominate our lives so much that we fail to live them.

I'm eager to know your interpretation though, that's what poetry is all about!

[Hbrook]

I had intuprited it as a love gone wrong because of how you described the beauty and how you described it dying.
The line " To a humple shade of pink almost to ashamed to be adored" Was my favorite :) I had thought itwas really cute and would fit perfectly in a love poem, but it suits what you wrote really well.

[OneAmongstMany]

Awesome, the joy of poetry is that it's subjective and each person can form their own opinion on what it means to them

[Hbrook]

My English teacher used to tell me that all the time 😂 She was an awesome teacher. I really like your work and i hope you keep writing!