Cupid's Victim

Kissed by a feather

Touched by the wind

Without my knowledge

My soul was skinned

My heart was pinned

Hung on your wall

A beauty enslaved

I became your doll

No floor to crawl

A slave to the heart

I wish I'd been killed

By cupid's dart

Displayed like art

A body enframed

Nothing left but a mind

That can never be tamed

Reviews

[Lotus Flower]

I loved the flow of this, my favorite line was " I wish I'd been killed by cupid's dart" great job Cheré

[Emily]

Great flow throughout this piece. Interesting and well written. I like it! A very unique poem,which makes it all the better.

[Hebe]

Great rhythm, and definate feeling of being lovesick ...great piece!

[Paul Bell]

It's sometimes difficult to keep the continuous rhyme in a poem. But you've done it in great style.
Cupids arrow may hit. But that doesn't mean a bed of roses.

[Einstein Noodle]

fun in rhyming but such a serious hurt put on your speaker .. i am an admitted optimist (to the chagrin of wife and friends sometimes) and so am happy in the resilience of your closing lines .. heavily emotive read for me ..its a deep pain no doubt
E.

[Omikron]

Thanks for stopping by and for your comment, much appreciated.

// O

[BBP]

Digging this one! Prisoner of love....or lust..or a psychopath?!?! All so similar! lol

[Omikron]

I agree, sometimes you can't tell a difference... Thanks for reading and reviewing, means a ton :)read moreI agree, sometimes you can't tell a difference... Thanks for reading and reviewing, means a ton :)

// O

[mum]

"without my knowledge my soul was skinned " !!!!

this is amazing. the flow is perfect

[Omikron]

Thank you! Looking forward to reading your works as well!

// O

[Tony Jordan]

Great skill in rhyming the end of the previous stanza with the start of the next. I appreciate the work involved in that.
The imagery - a trophy on a wall - enslaved - excellent!
"I wish I'd been killed by Cupid's dart" - says it all.
Class!

[Omikron]

I'm so thrilled that you noticed, it was a small detail I just thought of to see how many actually noticed it.
Thanks for the kind words and I appreciate your review very much.

// O

[Tony Jordan]

As a former exclusive rhymer I would have been very very pleased with this.
It was only right to highlight it.
You're very welcome Omikron

[Bear]

Bravo! Sad that there are emotional monsters out there looking to collect relationship trophies. Great topic and presented in a thought provoking way, well done my friend Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Omikron]

There can never be love if there isn't hatred, and pain makes us love harder. Thank you for reading and commenting, it's very much appreciated :)

// O

[Emily]

Love this!!
Great idea for a poem!!

[Omikron]

Thank you Emily, it's the simplest yet most complex theme that exists, and that is love, and all the dark corners of it.

Thanks for reading!

// O