Away, Impurities

These past weeks have been hard on me, I apologize for giving up on my Christmas project. Here are some thoughts for your pennies.

Coat my face with toxins

Then wash them away

 Then coat it with toxins again

Then wash them away again

Then l look at myself in the mirror

Then I wash the tears away 

Then I coat my face with toxins

Then wash them away again

Then I cream my face with anguish

And wash it away

I grease my leathery sorrow

And wash it away again

Imperfections and wrinkles intruding

I'll wash them all away

Time is eager to put me in debt

I'll simply wash the debt away

I'll keep coating my face with toxins

Then wash them away

If there's a hint of life in my face

I'll wash it all away

Away impurities!...

Reviews

[Lotus Flower]

The repetition gave off great imagery. Bravo!

[Emily]

Interesting piece, loved the repetition! I feel like the repetition added power to your poem. I interpreted as, sometimes, we as people, long for perfection so much, that we will relentlessly try to obtain that (perhaps) unreachable perfection. "Imperfections and wrinkles intruding" good line! Keep up the great work.

[D Connolly]

This makes me think of how we see ourselves as SO imperfect when we age and we try so hard to wash it away with potions and creams. I'm thinking of aging and the cosmetic fight against it when I read "time is eager to put me in debt" and "if there's a hint of life in my face, I'll wash it all away". I don't know that I've picked up what you're putting down here, but that's what I'm reading into this. I like the poem and it's very well written. A previous reviewer said it was a bit depressing, however I think it's a little funny how you've described a never ending procedure that doesn't ever give the results you want it to; washing over and over. It's just so true, and I'm actually laughing about it, but my sense of humor is wacky.

[mum]

this is a heavy one! its beautiful and raw and sad and real. If only we could wash it all away...

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Depressing poem but I like the way you wrote it!

[Omikron]

Depressing is my ultimate description of my character haha... Thanks for reading!

// O

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think we are so covered in impurities all over that no matter what we do there is no escaping them and I mean about the impurities of our minds.. This was a truly thought provoking read! Good work!

[Omikron]

Yes, that was the message I was aiming for. Thank you for reading and commenting...

// O

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are most welcome ☺

[Bear]

Almost sounds like mans treatment of mother earth, now this is going to stick in my mind and I love when I read something that lingers with me. Well done my friend Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Omikron]

What an interesting interpretation, I never thought of it that way! Bit yes I agree, mother earth sure has taken several beatings, and it's tragic time we live in when people destroy the very thing keeping them alive, our only home, our planet earth. Frightening.

Thank you for reading, and taking your time to write another excellent review. I appreciate the support, Bear :)

// O

[Tony Jordan]

This recalled to me the scene in the series Vikings (not to be confused with the excellent movie 'The Vikings' which starred Kirk (100 years old last week) Douglas) - in which the warriors were seen gobbing into a large bowl with water and they in turn washed their face with the green globules of every man in the village. The reason I think was to set that 'all men are equal'.
But to wish to wash (lol) all away and be clean speaks of regret and remorse - forgiven...

[Omikron]

Never heard of neither of them, but they sure sound intriguing!

[Tony Jordan]

holy crap - the ink on my review wasn't even dry...
;p