Prosperous Abandonment

There was once a land so great and prosperous,

That all who crossed it saw a perfect future.

The buildings were constructed of flawless embellishments and measurement.

The clear, glittering water

Supported the lush fertility of the full, abundant crops and flora.

Those then fed the healthy, happy, and clean people and fauna.

Life was perfect.

This ended abruptly,

As an overpowering depression

Defeated the Joy.

The land is now abandoned and empty.

Flora has overgrown the crumbling ruins of the structures.

As merely a few streaks of light peek through the intertwined branches,

The land is entirely hallow with despair.

Yet, one young lass never left.

A lass whom has never been seen.

A lass whom has never let go.

She shakingly grasps the shards.

The shards of her memories,

And cradles them to her heart.

She has sealed her lips,

As she bears no emotion.

She has sealed her heart and her mind

For eternity.

As she wanders the land,

Never knowing of anything more.

Author's Note

I've been reading your reviews. You guys make me feel so special!!! <3

Reviews

[Starr Mist]

I love it! Very good! To me, it feels like this was a young innocent girl who had been attacked and now won't open herself up to anyone. Or, it could be American societies "you gotta be this and this to be beautiful" point and to achieve that, she damages herself.

Once again, very well written! :)

[Sometimes Blood]

nice, interesting and imaginative poem.

[Mary C]

Fabulous Work ..........................

[Susan Beth Horvath]

A passionate piece full of stunning imagery and excellent phrasing.

[Me]

wow!!this is an awesome write!!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I really like the thought and story in this poem. Nice write, details, descriptions, and imagery.

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Another well written piece...

[Zombie Waffle]

I like it. It paints a very vivid, very detailed image, as poetry should.

A note:
"A lass whom has never been seen" - I'm not entirely sure that this is the correct use of 'whom' rather than 'who'. At any rate, 'whom' sounds odd in this context. Perhaps replacing it with simply 'who' would help the flow of the piece.

[Pax]

the beauty of deep sadness..in words...amazing write..

[eatmills]

I found this very hauntingly sad. Nice form and well written. Thanks so much for the share.

[Om Nom Ninja Sheep]

c: You're welcome~!