Prosperous Abandonment

Prosperous Abandonment

A Poem by Om Nom Ninja Sheep

There was once a land so great and prosperous,
That all who crossed it saw a perfect future.
The buildings were constructed of flawless embellishments and measurement.
The clear, glittering water
Supported the lush fertility of the full, abundant crops and flora.
Those then fed the healthy, happy, and clean people and fauna.
Life was perfect.
This ended abruptly,
As an overpowering depression
Defeated the Joy.
The land is now abandoned and empty.
Flora has overgrown the crumbling ruins of the structures.
As merely a few streaks of light peek through the intertwined branches,
The land is entirely hallow with despair.
Yet, one young lass never left.
A lass whom has never been seen.
A lass whom has never let go.
She shakingly grasps the shards.
The shards of her memories,
And cradles them to her heart.
She has sealed her lips,
As she bears no emotion.
She has sealed her heart and her mind
For eternity.
As she wanders the land,
Never knowing of anything more.

© 2012 Om Nom Ninja Sheep


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Om Nom Ninja Sheep
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I love it! Very good! To me, it feels like this was a young innocent girl who had been attacked and now won't open herself up to anyone. Or, it could be American societies "you gotta be this and this to be beautiful" point and to achieve that, she damages herself.

Once again, very well written! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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nice, interesting and imaginative poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Fabulous Work ..........................

Posted 10 Years Ago


A passionate piece full of stunning imagery and excellent phrasing.

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wow!!this is an awesome write!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


I really like the thought and story in this poem. Nice write, details, descriptions, and imagery.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Another well written piece...

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like it. It paints a very vivid, very detailed image, as poetry should.

A note:
"A lass whom has never been seen" - I'm not entirely sure that this is the correct use of 'whom' rather than 'who'. At any rate, 'whom' sounds odd in this context. Perhaps replacing it with simply 'who' would help the flow of the piece.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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the beauty of deep sadness..in words...amazing write..

Posted 12 Years Ago


I found this very hauntingly sad. Nice form and well written. Thanks so much for the share.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Om Nom Ninja Sheep

12 Years Ago

c: You're welcome~!

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