Goodbye

heartbreak from a woman's point of view

Goodbye,
Who knew words did carry thorns,
The couch caressing my butt,
My cardigan cuddling my soul,
The breeze whispering in my ears,
Bringing the tears hanging on to my eyes,
I cry in pain,
The hurt is from within,
Where did I go wrong,
Tired of battling with this sad song,
Thought my heartbeat was what you saw,
That made you promise me the world,
Our late night conversations,
Filled with promises for the future,
Never thought they will wither away,
I lowered my dignity to serve you my virginity,
Now I question your integrity,
The lesson becomes a huge slap from reality,
Nevertheless my flesh wants you back,
Still fragile to your deceptive words,
My bed now frightens me,
The torture of memories it feeds my mind,
Constantly hunting my emotions,
I thirst for the day we cross path again,
So i can ask why you said goodbye.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[J3ssInJupit3r]

I am in love with this. The insane emotion that flows through your aching words captivates me, makes me cling to your every sentence. The flow, though it does not rhyme, is perfect and I am glad you chose for it to not because this way it conveys your raw emotions that much more. I hope that one day I can write as well as this! So beautiful.

[Penny]

The last two lines.. They just break my heart. Because I've felt the same, not once but twice and I must say it feels awful. But what can you do.. This regret it goes away when you have happiness in present and there's no guarantee for it. Very nicely written.

[Olumegbon]

Thanks for the review

[silar]

good ,Do you like the pet?

[Benita Paloja]

Goodbye's are the hardest part of life. I always ask myself, when people part, where does the love go? I guess I have yet to find the answer. Lovely poetry, as always! Thanks for sharing!

[Olumegbon]

Thanks so much for the review, I appreciate.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

A goodbye is always hard and in this conditions you describe still more. Thank you for sharing these words. :) Rudi

[Olumegbon]

Thanks so much Rudi

[Sultrysoul]

Very spot on with emotions. Feelings of disregard for the heart rigs true in these words. Love give by a woman entails so much sacrifice and that one word can be soul ripping. Thank you for this poem

[Olumegbon]

Thanks for the review, I appreciate.

[wordman]

makes you wonder,is it real or is it memorex ?they will deceive you

[Olumegbon]

thanks a lot.

[Lyingwithlions]

Wow, very deep and moving. Definitely a question I've avoided in the past.
Your words flowed and read with ease. Well done!

Thank you for sharing. :)

[Olumegbon]

thanks a lot for the review