Infertile Journey

The unexpected is now expected,
On a blind road not knowing where it leads,
With a bag of joy to share,
Lost travellers telling me sorrow is near,
Decreasing my hope in bliss,
Regardless i still persist,
Wish i never have to say it was stupid,
The journey that was initiated by cupid,
I still keep pushing
With the act to disappoint spectators,
My pace slowly reduces,
About to reach the peak but my legs are weak,
I was so adamant that i became less observant,
I've been bleeding from my back,
Right from the very start,
Multiple stab wounds to my spine,
I then realise the journey is an illusion,
There's never a companion's submission
So i retreat and crawl back into my shell,
Forgetting about the journey that is barren,
To join the lost travellers who are returning,
To the point we don't notice the infertile journey anymore.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Stephen]

Wow..Great poem friend. I can relate to this journey. I have already been on the journey there and back again. Thanks friend for sharing

[Olumegbon]

thanks alot, I appreciate.

[ANTO]

The antagonist took their eye of the ball and suffered the consequences here. Vigilance is the watchword and when we forget that we are bound to become one of the herd.
Powerful imagery will be replaying in my mind for some time to come.

well penned Olumegbon

[Olumegbon]

thanks alot friend for the review, gladly appreciate.

[micky]

Another great write.....i love it

[Olumegbon]

thanks alot.

[Saddam]

Wonderful expression friend.
Great read...

[Olumegbon]

thanks alot, i appreciate.

[EightBlueHearts]

Great depiction of life's roads intertwining, all the while we get beaten down, only to get back up and keep pushing forward. Really good :)

[Olumegbon]

Thanks very much for the review, i really appreciate.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Very good, thank you for sharing this wonderful poem, Olumegbon. :) Rudi

[Olumegbon]

thanks so much for the review Rudi, i really appreciate.

[alf]

Hi. I got this sense of a poet who has experienced a bad love(??) and despite warning signs, verbal and visual, followed the path and had misgivings realized. I had a momentary glimpse of hope that never was fulfilled, hence the unexpected became the expected. I thought this was a sensitive baring of grief for the end of a relationship, and the pain was real, sorrow seeping into the words and crying their own tears. Loved it, alf

[Olumegbon]

i like the fact that you really do understand it properly...thanks for the review.

[~EO]

I really do like the portrayal of the seemingly inevitable journey that we all will take at one point in our lives, especially when you say
"Forgetting about the journey that is barren,
To join the lost travellers who are returning,
To the point we don't notice the infertile journey anymore."
because as most emotionally driven pieces are personal experiences; this one however ties in the other people along the same sort of journey, and so including the audience into a personal piece like this that is so powerful with its words makes this a very beautiful piece.
Good job, i really enjoyed it.

[Olumegbon]

i appreciate your understanding of the poem, thanks a lot for reading.

[Deepika]

A great work dear friend depicting an fluctuations that's part of each one's life. At times we strive hard and merely realize at the end that there's no other way than a U-turn. But there's lot we gain as a part of the venture.

[Olumegbon]

Very true, thanks alot dear, I really appreciate the review.

[JayceeC]

I like this a lot, but even after reading it several times and looking for clues I'm left with the question of writers intent. Readers will always apply their own experiences to our writing if we are doing a good job. I saw perhaps a relationship that you've been warned againsy and pursued anyway. And now its not all roses with this headstrong and perhaps unpredictable partner. Being blinded until you are so lost you don't notice how bad it is. That's from my POV , just because I've been there. If yhis was not your thoughts or intent you may want to review content for intended message.

[Olumegbon]

Beautifully analysed, that's exactly what I'm talking about...thanks for your understanding and review, i really appreciate.