Kiss of Life

Love poem. (Stud M. Note Book) :)

Salt stained cheeks fall into your chest

My face buries itself into your warmth

My hands tremble longing for a form of shelter

And grasp onto your sides not daring to let go

I feel my pulse begin to quicken 

And the more I gasp the worse it gets

You try and calm me

But I panic as I realize

I’ve forgotten how to breathe

I begin to go lightheaded

It feels as though the world could slip away

Parts of my body have gone limp

And you are now my only support

But right as I’ve reached my limit

I feel your hand lift my chin

Your lips on my lips

And like a kiss of life

My lungs expand with air

My eyes begin to focus in

There you sit staring into my eyes

I watch you

I love you

I need you

Forever and always

Reviews

[Laura Maidah]

"itself" in the second line is not predicated. It's implicit in connotation.
The second stanza is staggeringly beautiful. The third stanza first line gets a little worn in prosody, but the fourth picks up momentum in pacing, meter, and tone. The last stanza? I'm sorry. It sounds like a fortune cookie. The last four lines only. The first two lines are my favorite, except for the misspelled "staring". Unless you meant a pun on a starry-eyed gaze? But I don't think that was your intention.