Restored

A Free-write :)

Clapping of thunder

as God pounds his fists

sheets of rain

as Jesus begins to cry

and clouds cover the sky

blocking all rays of sunlight 

Why does such a veil of saddness

Bring forth such life to the Earth?

As drought withers the Earth

and pure nature falls to fire

and everything around us 

slowly begins to die

the flowers on porches

the grass covering the ground

the poor boy on the corner

using a garden to eat

the mother of the boy

filled with heartache, guilt, and grief 

the church no one can support any longer

and such a thing as this

sends the Heavens to ponder

and as Jesus's tears begin to pour

all life on Earth is again, restored 

Author's Note

This is a free-write I wrote. I believe that means that I don't edit, or revise it :) However I might post a revised version later, so all suggestions are helpful :D

Reviews

[Celestial Witch Child]

This is amazing. The only suggestion I have is to replace one time you use the word Earth in the middle of the first stanza- it feels a little repetitive.

[Mark D]

Really good. Very nature/earth driven. Interesting knowing that it is a "free-write".

The lines "the poor boy on the corner, using a garden to eat" are beautiful.

Good piece which was an interesting read. Well done

[Kitty Robinson]

very heart warming

[Whiskurz]

I agree the imagery is wonderful......Bravo my friend......Whisk

[Serenity Faith]

For no editing or revision done to it, it's wonderful! The imagery is great! Keep up the good work ^_^

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

I love it. so honest, so pure...excellent write, my dear!

[Olivia Marie]

Thank you :)

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

No problem :D

[Androglossia]

Your poem tells the secret of life that flows in us all. Life on earth is a paradox. One minute you'll see it unfair and then you will see that it all happens for a reason. Nothing happens by luck or by chance, the timing is perfect. A huge sufferring has a greater purpose.

I love the way you use the free verse form of writing. Its simplicity and loosely defined structure made it easy to follow. Good work!

[Olivia Marie]

:D ! Thank you

[Androglossia]

You're welcome!

[Sam Gregory]

Powerful, very good especially since its a free write. Keep at it :)

[Olivia Marie]

Thank you :)

[Sam Gregory]

Anytime :)