The unusual

The unusual

A Story by Olafash
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The unusual thing a young man sees his parents doing

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I heard groans in the middle of the night, i opened my eyes and could barely see but that didnt stop me from realising that my mom was not by my side. I hate being alone, "my mom knows i hate being alone but yet she left me. Why?". I staggered to the living room in search of my mom. But there was my mom with my dad. She was doing someting i had never seen her do to dad. Dad was groaning or so i thought. And mum was there holding him like my aunt mary was held when she gave birth to sam. But dad was not behaving like my aunt mary, dad was bleeding fron his nose, eyes and mouth. Minutes later they were both gone, hours later i saw a flock of family member, days later i realised the unusual had happened

© 2014 Olafash


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This is unique. It's a mystery to me. I found misspellings, you should probably research the use of punctuation, and although there was an encouraging beginning, the middle and end could use some structuring and enhancement. Keep writing, keep it interesting so the reader wants to read more.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Olafash

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I would definately look into all you mentioned.

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Added on May 28, 2014
Last Updated on May 28, 2014
Tags: Sorrow, death, tragedy, pain, loss

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Olafash
Olafash

Lagos, South west, Nigeria



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I am thinker by nature. I imagine alot of different things which influnce the way i write. I naturally hate following the status quo which makes me think and write out of the norm. more..

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