I Thought

I thought you loved me,
But I think you just wanted my key.
I always thought you'd be mine
Until you left me like a street sign.

You always made me happy,
Even if you acted quite sappy.
You told me every time you saw me "I love you baby,"
But I came to find out it was more so a maybe.

I even thought you were my first love,
Until you made a friend be your one and only lovely dove.
You thought I'd wait for you,
And even thought I'd be your boo.

I believed everything you said,
You had me laced around you like a thread.
I shouldn't have believed it,
But I still stayed committed.

My depression is too much,
And I can't even feel your touch.
I feel dead inside
Since the first time you lied.

Being with you made me feel so alive,
But then you made my heart deprived.
I thought you'd never leave,
Even if I was deceived.

I have so many thoughts running through my mind,
Maybe I just don't understand why you killed our bind.
Why did you do this?
It's almost like a part of me is just missed.

I give up on holding onto you,
You're just going to do what you want to.
One thing you have to give back,
Would be the key that I now lack.

You'll never deserve my trust,
Since you've covered me in the dust.
Don't try to talk to me
Because I don't care anymore, you see.

I will forget all things that you did,
Even if I have been hid.
You can keep things I gave,
But you may live in a cave.

My mom told me to watch,
Since all you drink is scotch.
You pulled my heart to shreds,
Making me full of hatred and dread.

I still haven't understood why you wanted me to hurt,
It's like you wanted to treat me like dirt.
Every time you were upset I was there,
Just like I always did care.

All I wanted was somebody to care,
But getting that from you is rare.
I thought you loved me enough to fight for me,
But now you have to pay the fee.

You can have your hoe
Because I'm going to run from you like a doe.

Reviews

[Crowley]

Sounds pretty painful. This one is full of emotion, which makes for good poetry. I see that you like to rhyme. I would like to see you try a similar piece without the rhyme and see how it comes out. Sometimes rhyming is good when the idea is in need of a rhythm or cadence. When you are trying to cope with and spit out raw emotion, sometimes it helps to explore it without the rhyme first and see how it turns out. If rhyming seems appropriate, come back in afterward and see if it fits. I don't know, just one mans desire to see the other side of your writing. I liked this one, it was pretty powerful and full of the feelings that make good writing.

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"I still haven't understood why you wanted me to hurt,
It's like you wanted to treat me like dirt.
Every time you were upset I was there,
Just like I always did care."

{see-this good-great rhyme scheme-great irritated/angry mood-i love this !!!}

james:-)

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

"My mom told me to watch/Since all you drink is scotch/You pulled my heart to shreds/Making me full of hatred and dread" - These are my favourite lines.

An amazing poem, full of great rhythm and soul. You express your feelings brilliantly. Well done :)

[Alice_In_WhateverLand]

this poem reeks of sadness and disappointment. great job :) x

[Lydia Blackwell]

this is a great poem with good rhyming and flow-

My fav line is

believed everything you said,
You had me laced around you like a thread.

that I can identify with- if you are going to be laced around anyone- make sure they are just as enamored of you! Sometimes it's hard to know until it's too late, though- I feel your pain. Good write!