Pursuit of a Teen Romance

Something I wrote ages ago after coming to terms with my first break up. Mushy romantics are not really my strong points but I feel this is good enough to share.

Breathless,

We'll stand together shaking.

Under street lamps 

casting their sickly orange shadow over the wet landscape.

Rain will fall,

Mixed with tears of joy and loss

And we shall never let go

The stars will refuse to outshine us,

The sun will follow suit.

We shall stand above our oppression,

The envious eyes of those that dare to say we dream to much,

Will watch bitterly as we cut from one another the lives we want to lead.

We shall stand beneath the heavens as they spill out,

For not even the sky, seemingly so boundless,

Could keep from shattering under our force.

For only we, could ever assume,

That the passage of time will slow, or bend

To fit our needs.

Months, may be eternity,

Words worth shouting for all to hear,

Why then, do they sound far more important, whispered.

Our souls,

Mingled, dancing, in perfection.

Our eyes, two glistening open doors,

But we will depart from one another,

And the beautiful paintings etched in our minds,

Will scar the flesh and taint our bones.

Our skies will remain shattered,

Our Stars will shine, dully in spite

The Sun's warmth will burden our hearts.

And our eyes will mourn the loss of the perfect form they cried to call their match

We shall fall ashamed to our serpentine spirits

As they pull from one another

But even in this submissive turmoil,

We shall stand above those that dared to call us heretics in passion.

Selfish in our unencumbered giving,

Greedy in our flattered acceptance,

and naive to believe we were in love.

For the world is large,

For I am small,

And if only in my dreams, will we be together,

Then so be it.

For there exists more peace, and unity behind my own closed eyes.

Than the countless watching us.

Reviews

[Harmonica winds]

This is really Good, thought it was brillant and beuatiful and emotional. Awesome write

[Matthew Smith]

o_O "Good enough to share"? You undersell yourself, I believe. Much better than the the run-of-the-mill "I'm sad/she hurt me/daisies drown in the stream/of my life." bullshit you'll see on WritersCafe.

I really enjoyed this.

[Robert Nicholls]

Enjoyable reading.
It speaks to many of those people who have felt the same is past relationships, yet never had a way to express it.
Keep writing!

[Summer'sBreeze]

beautiful writing