Art Incarnate

21/7/13 You cannot see the world in its entirety, until you have tasted its little miracles; felt its real gifts, the unnoticed sublimities of the earth

Silver tongues make art incarnate
In a labyrinth of golden gates
And woeful weeds,
That wind
And bind bridges to paradise,
Or fallacy,
To reality,
Smothered in delusive riches; sprinkled with silenced rubies.

Behold the budding apples,
Unspoken,
Unseen,
Neglected and serene,
In the cracks of buttoned alleys made mute by the shrieks of revere
Our glittering beacons allure.

Apollo whispers in the wind,
Perchance of tousling Vanity's fair hair with slight secrets,
Of hidden petals.

A maze remains mystery
Until it's vines let you float,
True jewels are kept shadowed
By the rose that will gloat -
And pathways will wait,
Satisfied
To rest undetected
Behind humble seeds.

Reviews

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

"woeful weeds,
That wind
And bind bridges to paradise"..
I'm forced to slow down and fully take in the word and phrasing structures
read too fast, phrases like "silenced rubies" feel awkward and don't make sense
but it all makes perfect sense when viewed properly
so this is kind of a grammatical technique to tie into your theme, I guess we could say
slow down and see and feel the hidden beauty..the layers of it, even
subliminal, yes, and elegantly conscious, as well
with a fantasy element that mirrors creation with imagination
it's safe to say that you put together something great, to stand the test of time, even

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you for you detailed review, I'm glad you enjoyed this piece!!

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

yw, when I'm motivated I'll def enjoy and review more!

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you, I hope to see you around! :)

[Dana Alsamsam]

this poem is what they would call in the modeling world: "ugly pretty"

absolutely fabulous demonstration of beauty in simplicity or in the places that maybe others don't see it. everyone knows that diamonds and rubies are beautiful, but not everyone can see beauty in the furthest corners of nature.

i think those few longer lines you have in here could flow better or maybe be broken in different places to help the flow of the piece, but overall amazing work. i love the idea of this piece! :)

[Ohhhwillow]

You've hit the nail on the head with what I was trying to express, I'm glad that was clear, and appreciate your kind review! :) Ah and I understand what you mean about the longer lines, they were supposed to emphasis the theme, as a structural technique more than one used for reading the metre of the poem.. I will definitely give it a look over however as I have a strong respect for your critical opinion. :)

[Tai Ryens]

Forgive me if I am wrong, I type this at 4 in the morning, but it sounds like a land of no endeavors. Expectations of nothing but the worst overtake every other obsession, and you feel a lack of experience.. You could go further, advance farther if only you allowed yourself to tread upon the thorny, rubied flower bushes, and brighter gems await on the other side of the field. Yet still you convince yourself you are satisfied with what you have, for fear of turning over a stone to find a snare . . . Well done, I always enjoy your pieces.

[Ohhhwillow]

As always I allow my pieces to be open to any interpretation, as it is this that allows them to feel comfort in my words. I wrote this with the idea in mind of the worlds true, unseen beauty, that is the rust on silverware and lost memories down dark side streets. In reality, the worlds true treasures are often hidden behind flashing lights and pedestalled people, which is true for most aspects of life, not merely visuals. Virtue is rarer than vengeance, kindness is underrated, while vanity, is not. Thanks for reading Tai and for you vivid analysis!

[Baby Ricochet]

Great poem. It sounds cool when you read it out loud.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you Mark!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Great imagery in this one, and I really enjoyed the form and flow. If you read any of my work, you will see that I am a huge lover of lore and mythology, and the bringing in of Apollo and the Vanities...great stuff. You write with a decisive pen. Very nicely done...nothing to say save that I fully enjoyed the read. Well done.

[Ohhhwillow]

I love Greek mythology, and as a god known for being very beautiful, Apollo fitted my theme perfectly. :) Thank you for your interesting review Sarah!

[Brandon S. Whitten]

So much depth to this magnificent piece. Love the imagery. Thank you for sharing. An excellent read and write.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thanks Brandon for your kind review!

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write ...Thank you for sharing ...:)

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank YOU for reading! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Lover Of Words]

This one is quite something special my friend great job

[Ohhhwillow]

Thanks for stopping by Kelsey :)

[Luke Rawlings]

Another really good one but I think there is a spelling mistake at the beginning. "And bind briges to paradise" might be bridges.. I think. A really good poem and spectacular use of imagery. The structure had your signature on it, well done :)

[Ohhhwillow]

Ah thank for pointing that out for me Luke! I did this in a bit of a lazy fashion haha. :p I'm a little out of touch, but thank you for reading, and woo I tried to structure in to suit the theme I'm glad that was noticed! :D

[Luke Rawlings]

No problem! I'll just kick you in future reviews if the lazy style comes back ;)