Art Incarnate

21/7/13 You cannot see the world in its entirety, until you have tasted its little miracles; felt its real gifts, the unnoticed sublimities of the earth

Silver tongues make art incarnate
In a labyrinth of golden gates
And woeful weeds,
That wind
And bind bridges to paradise,
Or fallacy,
To reality,
Smothered in delusive riches; sprinkled with silenced rubies.

Behold the budding apples,
Unspoken,
Unseen,
Neglected and serene,
In the cracks of buttoned alleys made mute by the shrieks of revere
Our glittering beacons allure.

Apollo whispers in the wind,
Perchance of tousling Vanity's fair hair with slight secrets,
Of hidden petals.

A maze remains mystery
Until it's vines let you float,
True jewels are kept shadowed
By the rose that will gloat -
And pathways will wait,
Satisfied
To rest undetected
Behind humble seeds.

Reviews

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

"woeful weeds,
That wind
And bind bridges to paradise"..
I'm forced to slow down and fully take in the word and phrasing structures
read too fast, phrases like "silenced rubies" feel awkward and don't make sense
but it all makes perfect sense when viewed properly
so this is kind of a grammatical technique to tie into your theme, I guess we could say
slow down and see and feel the hidden beauty..the layers of it, even
subliminal, yes, and elegantly conscious, as well
with a fantasy element that mirrors creation with imagination
it's safe to say that you put together something great, to stand the test of time, even

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you for you detailed review, I'm glad you enjoyed this piece!!

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

yw, when I'm motivated I'll def enjoy and review more!

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you, I hope to see you around! :)

[VennelaMargame]

The music and sounds of the poem are very nice, and the rhythms work well, syncopated but not overly thumping or insistent.

There are some nice images, and turns of phrase, "cracks of buttoned alleys," for example. Just be careful of a phrase like "silver tongues" or "golden gates" because they are familiar phrases and can turn cliche.

Best wishes.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Masterfully crafted!! Your structure flow is exceptional, along with your well developed lines.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you for your time! I'm glad you enjoyed this one, I'm off to review one of yours now!!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

That just rolls off the tip off the tongue...with the expressiveness in the lines of this one...like the other I read of yours...I see you like using the wind in your work:

Apollo whispers in the wind,

[Ohhhwillow]

I do! I enjoy contrasting imagery of nature and industrialisation, working with materials right outside our doors. Thank you for reading Glen! :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

U r welcome...and keep your words a blazed...

[Eddie Phillips]

Speaks to me of hidden wonders and the possibility of the sublime. I connected with this piece immediately and enjoyed the full rhythmic journey. It was excellently crafted.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you Eddie, I couldn't agree more with you about the worlds hidden wonders, whether big or small, they are there, waiting to be acknowledged and for those who do, they are our beautiful little mysteries. Glad you connected with this piece friend, keep on reading and writing!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there is so much to enjoy in life...but we never see it if we are always looking for something else.

nicely done.

[Ohhhwillow]

I couldn't agree more Jacob. Thanks for stopping by!

[Frieda P]

Sometimes we don't see the magic of simplicity until it smacks us over the head and says 'pay close attention, this is life'...'true jewels are kept shadowed' I wonder in our lifetime, how many of these we truly do miss, those whispers and lovely nuances. A gracious read and good reminder Willow...

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you Frieda, you really have coined here in your review what I was trying to capture! Your reviews are a comfort friend, thank you

[Frieda P]

Nice to know Willow, probably because I used to miss the signals so often myself....my pleasure always ....

[Luke L]

Lovely stuff, very whimsical

[Ohhhwillow]

Thanks Luke!

[MandaBear]

Fabulous =) Great job on this poem =)

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you :)

[KeeD]

Behold the budding apples, unspoken, unseen, Neglected and serene.
/salute Willow has reached to the core of existence and painted a picture of enlightened beauty.
It's like seeing life in a trance, serene yet magical.

[Ohhhwillow]

It sounds as though I've written a poem about taking acid! :p Thank you for reading Keegan, that magical vibe is exactly what I happened to be going for!