Decomposing Canopy

1112/4/13 This was written to represent an idea I continue to have about beauty. I see it in everything. On broken bones and petals, on floorboards and in coffins. Each see it elsewhere, I suppose...

The underworld that dances,
That frantically prances in a strangers eye
Is anothers simple sublime.

Captured and set alight on a pedestal,
Your picture of an eternal heaven is not
Mine.

Deceiving drops of ink on futile bloodshed scrolls glisten in the dark,
To a heart we'll never know yet greet at the door with compassion.

A decomposing canopy of corpses screams to me through silence
As it defiles the iris of an unnamed man
Who reaches for the apple I am blind to,
Hidden behind my favourite tree.

A platinum breeze is anothers burden -
The one on his knees is the others fool.

My mind is a chest
And while empty at best to the explorer of a golden cage,
It's filled with fruit to you.

Shattered pieces fit like a puzzle
In an empty frame hanging from the wall
But please me on the floor.
This conscious crooked smile appears on a page in equal distortion.
For it carries a blade,
And wears a shade of pink ballet shoes,
In utopia and Hell.

The end is before the shutter button.
Perfection breaks the lense and pirouettes beyond

Author's Note

This is perhaps the longest piece I've actually posted so if you make your way through it all I thank you!

Reviews

[quinfinn]

willow is a prolific, thoughtful and intense poet who uses gorgeous and frightening imagery to exude the passion in her sublime writes. there is so much depth and substance to your poetry as to be tangible and solid. i rarely see writing of this caliber on this site. you are brilliant.

[Ohhhwillow]

I am speechless, that means the world to me haha. I never considered myself to be talented, I write what I feel and to have those feelings so deeply appreciated is very exiting for me. Thank you quinfinn

[quinfinn]

then you truly have the soul of poet.....embrace it and continue with your words

[Dana Alsamsam]

i love this concept. there's beauty in the breakdown. one man's trash is another man's treasure. there is beauty in the ugliness and seeing it is what makes you an artist. this is very insightful, willow! i definitely agree with your sentiments in this work. i also enjoy how in the second to last stanza you pull in yourself as one of these things that may be amazing to some and nothing to others.

[Ohhhwillow]

Exactly Dana! We cannot help but be attracted to certain things, and while we are set part from others in this - due to biology or nurture, who knows - our intrigue at dissimilar things from the last man, is in itself beautiful. In my eyes, corpses are beautiful, to another, they are repulsive. I'm glad to hear your enthusiasm, and understanding of this one yet again friend. :)

[Mary Christabel George]

This is so very deep.
I feel like I am learning more about poetry...:)

[Ohhhwillow]

I'm very pleased to hear that! Thank you for reading Mary :)

[Mary Christabel George]

You are welcome honey...

[B-poet]

A very deep & complex type of write. You're chosen style of diction just pulls the reader into a world of sublime creative imagery at it's beat. Great write. I'm adding this to my library. :-)

[Ohhhwillow]

Wow thank you! No greater compliment than being added to someone's library haha, feel free to send me your read requests! :)

[RainDancer1997]

Its dark but very beautiful:) Job well done! "Shattered pieces fit like a puzzle" great verse:)

[Ohhhwillow]

Can't thank you enough for all of your kind reviews - thank you so much!

[RachelReaper]

Wow. This was crazy good with the amount of sheer imagination you put into this, like we took a wandering trip through your thoughts, and it was vivid. "And wears a shade of pink ballet shoes, In utopia and Hell" were my favorite lines.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you so much Rachel, those lines I was afraid may cause confusion, I'm really glad you liked them. :)

[Will]

Loved it! Such power and emotion in this piece, but very controlled and polished. Perception and context truly change a thing, and you've shown that here. I especially loved this part here:

"A platinum breeze is anothers burden -
The one on his knees is the others fool."

Great write!

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you ever so much Will :)

[Luke Rawlings]

Your writing style integrates feeling and power straight from the very start. It was well worth the reading request. The poem is filled with imagery that sings, such as "platnium breeze" and "defiles the iris of an unnamed man". I really enjoyed your poem, I had to read it several times and I enjoyed each time immensely. Definitely going to read more of your stuff. Bravo, Willow. A really good read.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thanks Luke, send me a message if you have any specific poem you would like me to review of yours, my review box is absolutely swamped haha no idea how I'm going to get my way through it!

[Luke Rawlings]

I'll make sure to send you a couple haha. Just take your time with it, it'll overload soon :P

[MandaBear]

beyond beautiful =)

[Ohhhwillow]

Thanks Amanda :)

[Rachel Anderson]

Your writing style never ceases to amaze me. Excellent job, yet again, Willow. :)

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you Rachel!