Killing Ivy

7/3/13 We cannot help suffocate the people that we love, to our own detriment, often we love so much the colour drains from our loved ones. Perhaps poison would be a gift to many

I am the ivy you deter,
The weed you prefer to expel
For its sweet suffocation.

I hold,
An adhesive for ashes
Already departing in the crystal wind.

By design here lies a danger,
Beyond the grave a virtuous stranger to many
For the self given gift of poison.

I remain a vine of remorse
Though alas my nature is condemning.
A curse demanding pesticide,
An honest face I cannot hide
Is loyal to your asphyxiation.

What a tender damnation
I provide for my beloved.
A tremendous fate to have faith in Armageddon,
In amor that whispers crimson

Author's Note

I really need to write more, seems my creativity is lacking due to being so busy with other things!!! Opinions would be appreciated!

Reviews

[Kyle Sky]

Truly symbolic and beautifully versed. The imagery captured a picture of a weeded garden. The use of contradicting words, like "tender damnation", also provides a true presence of the irony of the whole idea. How one's love strangles the essence of the loved one. Amazing piece.

[Ohhhwillow]

Great review, thank you Kyle, your kind response is of great value!

[Jack...]

I love the theme and thought process you have applied to this poem. It breathes on its on and has now wrapped itself tightly around my mind, ever growing, constantly weaving. We do often engulf our loves with love, to the point of pushing them away, though we cling tightly...but do we ever learn? Very well done. Fabulous poem.

[Ohhhwillow]

I hope we do, I don't want to make this mistake again that's for damn sure Jack! Thank you for reviewing with such enthusiasm!

[Tricia O'Brien]

Wicked rad, I dig for sure

Trish-

[MOON]

Love the imagery and the subject we do suffocate those we love strange but true!

[Ohhhwillow]

Unfortunately, it is true

[marie]

lovely piecing, great imagery, i absolutely love it!!:) great job:)

[Ohhhwillow]

Thanks for stopping by Marie!

[marie]

No problem I love your work!!:)

[sheila.j]

I really like this. Especially how you took on something tangible like ivy and turned it into a piece with much more meaning.

[Ohhhwillow]

Anything is personifiable! :) Thank you for your review :)

[pasdepoisson]

Fantastic writing! I really love "I remain a vine of remorse" and the last stanza is a triumph. It's always refreshing to read a really original take on the "poisoned relationship" poetry.

[Ohhhwillow]

Hank you! I suppose there is such a thing as loving someone too much. Or maybe I'm just bad at it. Who knows, anyway thank you for the review and sorry about the rambling haha!

[patti]

i like reading your poems, they are dark but yet full of meaning behind it. Ivy is poison so are human full of poison. that why i like the comparison between those two! really good poem

[Ohhhwillow]

I enjoy making organic comparisons, as like plants and flowers, trees and the birds that sit within them, we have a core than condemns what we are. A nature that is undenyble

[patti]

yeah but i feel we are more like animals, well if you look at it we are more superior animals with more complex brains, than other pieces.

[Lily Mae]

I so loved it all but that third stanza was awesome.. powerful work.. :) xo

[Ohhhwillow]

This is actually the verse I felt was weakest, so I take pride in knowing it was not failed! Thank you for reading Lily Mae

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

This piece is dark and raw, i love the complexity of Ivy. Great work!

[Ohhhwillow]

While beautiful it is deathly to those around it. Shame really.. Thanks for reading Marc