Little Bird

12/1/13 One person can save you from the world, unfortunately, only you can save you from yourself and others lose faith when you lose control. No matter how much you love.

My feathers fall and turn to dust,
My wings burst into perfect wine -
Set alight by this darting tongue,
The brightest roaring flame of mine
That dwindles with your kiss
As magenta does at dawn.

The sparrow in vivacious winter collects brittle branches,
As I plead for yours,
With doubt by futile winds that shook them long ago,
I know,
The persistent hold resistant hope -
Frost is now composing
On the bedding for my hollow nest.

What a solemn place to rest
Little bird,
Beyond the dreams of flightless facades
That burn and yearn
To see afar,
To their crystal castles.
Mine is built with the debris of a sublime dream
The nestling place you leave for me to last a long forever.

Reviews

[pasdepoisson]

I think there's a bit here for every part of the poetic spectrum:

The lyrical side of me loves:
That dwindles with your kiss
As magenta does at dawn.

The bitter side:
Frost is now composing
On the bedding for my hollow nest.

Clever to compose so persuasive a piece for any persuasion.

[Ohhhwillow]

I like to pull in complex and contrasting emotions - in reality this is how we feel at most times, so why condense merely one feeling to a piece? That is my thinking. Anyway, thank you for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed this!

[sirenribbon@thehptshirt..]

This is beautiful.
Mine is built with the debris of a sublime dream..
Amaazzee
You were born to do a lot of things, writing is one of them :) Cheers

[Ohhhwillow]

Haha thanks! :) send me a read request anytime!

[sirenribbon@thehptshirtcompany]

sounds good:)

[sheila.j]

The imagery in this is very interesting and flows together well. I just really enjoyed this!

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you! I'm glad you did. :)

[RachelReaper]

"My feather fall and turn to dust" Excellent opening line! I've never heard that imagery line before and found it very interesting. I also loved the imagery of "crystal castles". Elegant.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you again for reviewing, means a lot. :) Glad you enjoyed it!

[Kyle Sky]

Such beauty and strength in the symbolism and message. There is no doubt in the message and this my reply,
"From the nest you shelter, of your lost feathers, I give a gale of my respect- a breeze for you to fly."
A beautiful and respected piece.

[Ohhhwillow]

Wow thank you, you responded with poetry that's so awesome, glad you enjoyed!

[I, Rene]

yes that is true, so many elements to combat when one can not be free to be her /himself, winds blow and shake foundations, impostors pose and no one knows, but this voice, this wind I'd know in my sleep. Beautiful, humbling, heart thrashing beauty in this write. ***

[Ohhhwillow]

Glad you enjoyed it! Thank you so much for reviewing. :)